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woodshed

by Elizabeth Jill











Author's Note: Go ahead!
Take a peek and tweak inside the wood!


This poem will change each time it's tweaked.
The default version is the first selection in each scrollbox

I hope you enjoy! Yikes!
Jill


06/25/2006

Posted on 06/25/2006
Copyright © 2019 Elizabeth Jill

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Mara Meade on 06/25/06 at 08:08 PM

I don't know whether to giggle (heh) or stand in awe of the way you've played the computer against the poetry, or vice versa. I like the juxtaposition, and I LOVE the fun I'm having making new poems by even random clicks. This is brilliant, Jill! Just brilliant!

Posted by Kyle Anne Kish on 06/25/06 at 08:21 PM

Ha! You have used your skills to make wonderful wordplay here ... just for all of us. How delightful. As Mara said, "I love the juxtaposition." I will be back to ponder and wander and play often with this. Thank you, thank you, thank you!

Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 06/26/06 at 12:43 AM

Ha! Poem that's a toy! Thanks, Jill. Fun, fun, fun!

Posted by Julie Adams on 06/26/06 at 06:45 PM

I love the openended possibilities you offer herein...wonderful and playful...thanks for sharing this, another great poem pushing the limits of poetry...all the best, *jewels*

Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 06/28/06 at 08:22 AM

eons ago someone turned into the whole universe after all tomorrow who knows who might be peeking into the woodshed... a definite touch of genius here...you always surprise and delight!

Posted by Charles E Minshall on 06/29/06 at 01:54 PM

This is funtastic. It goes on my favorites list....Charlie

Posted by Mara Meade on 06/30/06 at 01:28 PM

Just "peeking" at this again to read the comments! It's just sooooooooo fun!

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 07/06/06 at 03:14 AM

HAHA. Talk about fun with words. Every change in a pull down menu results in a new found poem. ;o)

Posted by Leslie Ann Eisenberg on 07/07/06 at 10:41 PM

dang, this is brilliant. how will it be displayed on the front page when it's POTD, i wonder? PK

Posted by Ashok Sharda on 07/10/06 at 02:39 PM

Meaning finds meaning in the meaning that you give them, either end. Normally, the matter determines its own form, but here, The form seems more decisive. Nice experiment with the form.

Posted by Rula Shin on 07/22/06 at 04:16 PM

Very intruiging and creative. An illusion that has us feeling the excitement of choice, while creation has already taken its natural form. Wonderfully surprising.

Posted by JD Clay on 08/02/06 at 03:15 PM

Somehow the ancients survived the whole universe, after all tomorrow you might be an inkblot. This is very ingenious and you get a 10 for creativity while resting on your laurels.

Posted by Leslie Ann Eisenberg on 11/02/06 at 03:01 AM

how has this not been POTD? hello, people!

Posted by Rachelle Howe on 11/14/06 at 04:18 AM

today
the Ancients
became
split infinity
thwarting
eternally
a secret
blurred
an imaginary enemy

" THIS IS SO COOL

Posted by Michael Faraday on 01/02/07 at 01:57 AM

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Posted by Rachelle Howe on 01/15/07 at 06:42 PM

eons ago
someone
became
the whole universe
simply dazzling
eternally
secret
might find us
an imaginary enemy


WOOT. i just found it again. good times.

Posted by Graeme Fielden on 06/23/07 at 03:43 PM

Kewl. how do you do this?

Posted by Paul Lastovica on 06/29/07 at 12:42 PM

i don't know when
the ancients survived
split infinity
but
peeking in the woodshed
I
will know
this poem

Posted by Sarah Graves on 07/18/07 at 03:47 AM

peeking in the woodshed metaphors became the whole universe and tomorrow a secret might be peeking in the woodshed This is awesome! Thanks for sharing :) +POTD

Posted by Mary Ellen Smith on 07/26/07 at 10:42 PM

Wow...the coolest thing I have ever seen/read....way cool!!!!

Posted by Aaron Michael on 08/18/07 at 12:48 AM

i've seen this done before. i've always wanted to know how...it's beautiful, Beth.

Posted by Jared Fladeland on 08/20/07 at 01:51 PM

you've won me over. i am yours to command

Posted by Lauren Singer on 09/21/07 at 07:15 PM

wow this is just amazing! +fav and POTD vote!

Posted by Meghan Helmich on 06/09/08 at 08:25 PM

this is crazy!

Posted by Charlie Morgan on 02/15/09 at 08:56 PM

...there used to be an Elizabeth Jill on this site, but she was wonderfully normal...beautifully normal, are you posting under her name? this is EVEN cooler than her usual gorgeous posts...do you have her? is she for ransom?...i got a job. i'll pay to get her back. please don't harm her...tell her she owns creativity.

Posted by Joan Serratelli on 02/17/09 at 04:15 PM

OMG- this the most creative piece I've ever seen! It's alsso fun to play with, like a puzzle one can put together in all different ways. How I missed this, I'll never know. Just great!

Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 04/27/09 at 12:22 PM

your words possess, aJillity, tranQuillity itself, the very essences of what the doctor prescribed, for to fix practically everything, and so I will do as he ordered, and take in copious amounts of Elizabeth's poesie and call him in the morning.

Posted by Lori Johnson on 05/08/09 at 02:05 PM

Just want you to know this is SO cool...is cool still a cool word? Anyway, very much worthy of POTD, but can't due to codes, html, etc. Very deserving though, nonetheless.

Posted by Melissa Arel on 01/05/10 at 10:14 PM

i can't believe i just found this. freakin awesome.

Posted by Glenn Currier on 09/08/10 at 08:55 PM

Oh! What a coooool idea. This was fun. Thank you for the romp.

Posted by JJ Johnson on 03/24/11 at 06:34 AM

in a blue moon we arrived peeking in the woodshed hence no matter what falls a secret blurred under the covers That was fun, where did you get this? jj

Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 03/28/11 at 11:46 AM

let me be the first to congratulate you on POTD which has the beauty mark of its author writ all o'er it.

Posted by Laurie Blum on 03/28/11 at 12:35 PM

So creative, an excellent choice for POTD! You've made poetry fun! Plus, you have #1 rated poem today too! Congrats to a great writer.

Posted by Ken Harnisch on 03/28/11 at 12:44 PM

I came late to the woodshed, Jill, so please forgive me! But I did like the voyeuristic plunge into sheer genius as poetry!!

Posted by George Hoerner on 03/28/11 at 01:00 PM

Congratulations on a GREAT POTD.

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 03/28/11 at 03:04 PM

I must have commented on this personally years ago. Great to see this as POTD!

Posted by Maria Massarella on 03/29/11 at 12:20 AM

"somehow someone became the whole universe simply dazzling eternally a secret found peeking in the woodshed" ... and Jill, i love the way this beams brilliance in potd skies ...

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 03/29/11 at 11:54 PM

Great to see this again, and especially up on the Top 10!

Posted by Angela Stevens on 05/13/13 at 09:17 PM

Creative and delicious words, methinks! *distracted by playing around* Marked this as a favourite and rightly so in my book.

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