| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Graeme Fielden on 09/04/03 at 07:45 PM sounds like the conversation i had with my parish priest many years ago Max...but seriously - your theosophical works are my definite favourite - they pinch and turn at pre-conception and familiar assumption quite deliciously! |
| Posted by Mara Meade on 09/04/03 at 09:10 PM Max, you have no idea how timely this is. I think I need to print and laminate this to carry in my wallet... so I can pull it out and re-read, reassure...and try to understand...! |
| Posted by Vimal Rony on 09/04/03 at 10:38 PM Max ur visualisation is out of this world. |
| Posted by Rachelle Howe on 09/04/03 at 11:08 PM max... even the moon could not do you justice. this is exquisite. |
| Posted by Kalikala Smith on 09/05/03 at 03:47 AM wow, who knew you could travel so far away and be so close to home all from a poem... this is great |
| Posted by Melissa Arel on 09/05/03 at 01:03 PM I can't finda favorite.. the whole poem is robust with imagery and beauty. Good work, Max! I love it. |
| Posted by JD Clay on 09/05/03 at 01:14 PM Wow! I love the way this flippant piece creeps up on you, then leaps out with a strong finish. Nice work, Max.
Peace... |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 09/06/03 at 02:01 AM Thought provoking indeed! What would the Inquisition done to you? LOL! |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 09/06/03 at 02:03 AM OOPS! Inquistion have done! ("teacher, teacher, tsk, tsk" -talking to myself) |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 09/06/03 at 02:24 AM Colorful language at its best. Mesmerising to say the least Max. Kudos for the great read! |
| Posted by Glenn Currier on 09/06/03 at 06:54 AM Max, this is just beautiful. The rhythm is so smoothe it gives further impression of the lathargic mood of the piece. Imprismed, indeed, brilliant double meaning in created word. Fantastic work. |
| Posted by Brian Francis on 09/06/03 at 11:24 PM Relevent in so many ways. Twisted enough to cause real reflection. Bravo!!!
--bf |
| Posted by Amber B on 09/07/03 at 05:48 PM I really love your play with light and dark... the contrast is not what you'd expect, but twice as wonderful! :) |
| Posted by Don Coffman on 09/07/03 at 10:49 PM Marvelously done. The last stanza makes it particularly interesting, mentioning the witching hour and the revitalization of the moon. |
| Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 09/08/03 at 06:33 AM brilliant, as usual... blessings... and i agree with this SO MUCH!... |
| Posted by Jason Wardell on 09/08/03 at 06:46 PM This is so amazingly beautiful and enchanting.. Only downside is it may cause me to stare at the sun, and that can't be too good for my eyes. ;) Anyway, very well done. I really enjoy this poem. |
| Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 09/09/03 at 10:59 AM brilliant work Max not as the dawn perchance to taunt but as the more subtle light of moon, to sleep perchance to dream. |
| Posted by Kimberly Bare on 09/09/03 at 06:56 PM So many comments...what else can I say...they are all true and then some...Exquisite writing!
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| Posted by Richard Paez on 09/13/03 at 03:46 PM Max, this is without a doubt the strangest extended metaphor i have ever encountered, but also one of the most effective! some days it does feel that the sun is not just the sweet-dream stealer, but a soul-stripper as well. yesterday was a day like that. if read during the sun's hours this poem is the lingering respite of a tall glass of lemonade, if in the evening, a smooth nightcap that helps one get over the dull ache of the residual photon-skin-glow. Either way, a great poem. Thank you for sharing this. {m} |
| Posted by Ginette T Belle on 09/19/03 at 01:48 AM easy to swallow...full of so many beautiful things...loved reading this... |
| Posted by Leslie Ann Eisenberg on 03/06/04 at 04:44 PM Congrats, Max, on POTD. As always, your scorching, brilliant imagery leaps from the page into my heart! |
| Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 03/06/04 at 08:15 PM first off, i want to scream "it's about time!!!"... ok, with that done, i am commenting again to say congrats on a well deserved POTD... and having read this again, out loud, it's full effect blasted through my room and made me pray for night fall... you rock!... blessings... |
| Posted by Jolie Jordan on 03/06/04 at 11:14 PM Congratulations on POTD Max! Pathetic's members couldn't have picked a better piece from you, I remember reading this & loving it (still do!) :) |
