| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 05/20/03 at 04:56 PM Lively read Rommel. Pretty good start! |
| Posted by Jane E Pearce on 05/20/03 at 07:19 PM Rommel-I do like your work so much. The imagery and metaphore is excellent. Jane |
| Posted by Traci Mabats on 05/20/03 at 11:58 PM wow, I love the part about getting bruised from being painted. |
| Posted by Ashok Sharda on 05/21/03 at 03:22 AM Metaphors are extremely 'alive' so much that one can 'see' it more than read and interpret.The 'visuals' are distinct and so appropriate that the SCENE presents it self as a first hand experience. You are a Poet Rommel, a gifted one. A natural poet, I suppose. |
| Posted by Anne Engelen on 05/21/03 at 07:02 AM It's good to read more of your work...dang Rommel, look what you did to me... You turned me into a fan of yours!! |
| Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 05/21/03 at 06:06 PM quite interesting imagery you've weaved here |
| Posted by Christina Bruno on 05/23/03 at 04:19 AM wonderful job!! |
| Posted by Ann Krischus on 05/23/03 at 01:27 PM awesome imagery. :) |
| Posted by Quinn Vokes on 05/23/03 at 04:21 PM well... what can i say? i agree w/all the above. |
| Posted by Jeanne Marie Hoffman on 05/23/03 at 09:45 PM Me thinks the canvas needs to reject its painter.
Very vivid, moved me to the point that I got pretty bothered at the person who was doing this to the speaker and had to remind myself it is a poem. (In other words, I like it) |
| Posted by Alex Smyth on 05/25/03 at 02:16 PM Wonderfully expressive! |
| Posted by Glenn Currier on 05/26/03 at 02:41 AM "cast of calloused cares " good phrase, evocative and points to the main message. The metaphor (or not) of painting also works. Nicely done. |
| Posted by JD Clay on 05/26/03 at 02:31 PM I really like the premise revolving around this piece. I would like to see more, or at least closure. Great stuff, Rommel.
Peace... |
| Posted by Andrew S Adams on 05/26/03 at 09:06 PM yes, i agree with alaina- everything in this poem is so full, so ambitious, so beautiful- but that last stanza certainly does leave something to be desired. You paint everything so perfectly, and then the last 4 lines kinda fall off. perhaps make them a bit longer. i'm still giving this perfect marks; the rest of it is just so powerful and intense. wonderful wonderful job. |
| Posted by Jean Mollett on 05/29/03 at 03:51 AM Hi Rommel,
Just read your poem, it's very good, so emotional. Love can be a pain at, & ya get hurt.
Then ya get over it, life goes on. Find a better love, that will treat ya right. I wouldn't change a thing. Peace & Joy, Jean |
| Posted by Lori I Wolfe on 07/27/03 at 03:58 PM I can so relate to these words ... I have even tried to paint them out of me ... I found that walking away and painting a new life brought back painless rainbows ... love this poem ... excellent work! |
| Posted by Brian Francis on 08/12/03 at 12:23 AM Thanks for this one. I like it just the way it is.
--bf |
