| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 01/18/09 at 07:43 PM Oh, this is tasty fun alright! "and curdle life with words"....SOUP"S ON!!! (Alphabet, of course....but here a child says, "mine only says 'ooooooooooowwww"...." sorry those are Cheerios......off to fulurpt! |
| Posted by Laura Doom on 01/18/09 at 08:36 PM Yes, yes and why, and all that swims between, the rime of the modern marinator :> |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 01/18/09 at 10:56 PM bwahahahahahahaha! with a bit of a bite and a boat load of humor, you always draw me in. I adore the visual of this piece - music notes and blue caps, and perchance the wisdom of a whooping crane?? I bow... |
| Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 01/19/09 at 03:26 AM Brilliant and just awesome on its own terms. |
| Posted by Jared Fladeland on 01/19/09 at 03:41 AM i do enjoy the playing with words. a lot of words i seldom think about used in this one. but it doesn't feel forced. which is a blessing. |
| Posted by Eli Skipp on 01/19/09 at 03:41 AM oh i love it! |
| Posted by Ken Harnisch on 01/19/09 at 01:37 PM oh what a gorgeous poem...i am in awe! |
| Posted by Mara Meade on 01/19/09 at 01:44 PM Incredible!!!! |
| Posted by Mara Meade on 01/19/09 at 01:44 PM Incredible!!!! |
| Posted by Alex Smyth on 01/19/09 at 11:44 PM I just keep coming back to read again and again. For lack of anything original to add, I just will Amen to all the comments afore, and say a heartfelt thank you for sharing your good things with us. |
| Posted by Meghan Helmich on 01/20/09 at 07:33 PM wonderful command of rhythm and form here, elizabeth. i really enjoyed this. |
| Posted by Sandy M. Humphrey on 01/20/09 at 10:42 PM Visually fun to read and quite captivating with it's Bold letters and rhyme and musical notes...Hannah and Jill did very well here...Thank you, Thank you, Thank you. smh |
| Posted by Stephan Anstey on 01/22/09 at 04:22 AM You know, there are no better artists than you. You may have peers, but no superiors. You're really marvelous. |
| Posted by JJ Johnson on 01/22/09 at 06:20 AM Yon poem is very deep, and as a ham radio operator, I think it's very cool to be morse-coded. I rather think I'd like to be stolen by poems. Completely unique and brilliantly creative! JJ |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 01/22/09 at 03:30 PM An unexpected and fun read Jill. Visually stimulating also! |
| Posted by Colleen Sperry on 01/22/09 at 04:11 PM this is completely amazing!! beautiful and fabulously crafted! |
| Posted by Eric Hinkle on 01/28/09 at 07:31 AM I love it! I doubt it's supposed to sound like the Pogues, but that's the tune I'm singing... :) |
| Posted by JD Clay on 02/01/09 at 04:50 PM Your wordliness is beyond compare, Ms. Jill. I love how you spin the reader mind in torrents yet unknown. A linguists dream embroiled on the tongue of the sea. Outstanding stuff! |
| Posted by Charlie Morgan on 02/05/09 at 05:11 PM ...hey, elizabethJill, tll ebeneezer, too late! didn't you promise to marry me in '05, '06, orrr was it '07 mmmm. this is scrumptous. |
| Posted by Julie Adams on 02/07/09 at 03:04 PM Damn Elizabeth, this is fabulous! I don't know how it escaped me so long...I am floored by your sturdy command of language, your vivid and flourishing imagery, and fine tune of a true poet's 'ear' heard throughout...how you weave together such a rich tapestry, mere words of straw spun into gold, you'd leave Rumpelstiltskin dumbfounded and mumbling in your wake...so glad to share this site with the likes of you...it's always a pleasure, peace, ~jewels |
| Posted by Dave Fitzgerald on 02/12/09 at 04:12 PM Oh that is great. And I love this... "I seethe for all the slaughterbrogues
those slinky festing yergs
who tromp into the minds of us
and curdle life with words."
Brilliantly done. So clever.
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| Posted by Joan Serratelli on 02/16/09 at 06:39 PM This piece is really good. It deserves to be read and re-read. I see something new with every read. Your creativeting is outstanding! |
| Posted by Nanette Bellman on 02/18/09 at 06:29 PM i can't believe i didn't read this sooner. you have an amazing way with words. |
| Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 03/13/09 at 02:20 PM Tender is the Night and Day of this Ode,
perish to think, Elizabeth, had you not started
your ignition,
not stirred your quill from dreams, the fertile tale of
yon hipman would not be seethed
and these words, cresting in their rhythms would have remained
anon at heart, not brought so to fruition.
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| Posted by Jo Halliday on 09/16/09 at 12:57 PM I also don't know how you do it! Not just an exhibit of language's mastery, but employing it so skilfully; joy dances from each line even if it's satirical here and taking the head in both hands there; and yet it sparkles and sparkles and is just a flashing dervish with scimitars hanging round his skirt! |
| Posted by V. Blake on 01/05/10 at 02:42 AM You have absolutely no business calling me a genius with a talent that so very clearly surpasses my own. This is amazing. Adding this to my favorites right away. |
| Posted by Melissa Arel on 01/06/10 at 02:28 AM this is simply amazing! i stand in awe :) |
| Posted by Michelle Angelini on 08/23/11 at 04:39 AM Jill, I'm glad I came to your site to read it. I love this and Congrats on POTD! It has such a flowing beat and a wonderful story to boot. ;~D |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 08/23/11 at 03:23 PM Good to see this as POTD! |
