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In The Wake Of An Albatross
by JD Clay
Thirteen meters of yacht
Is a speck
In the Pacific of things
Adrift
The swell and swale the
Gust and gale
The void
Pushed and pulled where
Seabirds wing and
Fishes school in
Spiral galaxies
Eighty squares of Dacron snap
Attention to the
Pitch and yaw
Amalgamy of indigo
Feathering
The southern trades
The pangs of port the
Captain’s log a
Soggy deed to the sea
~jadi
12/23/2006 Author's Note: Reflections from the bowsprit of a Christina 43'
Posted on 12/23/2006
Copyright © 2024 JD Clay
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 12/23/06 at 08:10 PM Here I am drawn immediately to the poet's perspective, and we are as "speck"-like in the immense void
as this boat and "adrift". Not only the great blue expanse moves us, but also we are aware of the heights, where "seabirds wing" and the depths as well, where fish "school in spiral galaxies". (Beautiful and evocative). The title makes me wonder-- so is this "wake" we follow (the "albatross") as well as a great bird, is it, in time, the emotional pull we follow, - --with this tremendous vision and release, sailing out in its wake? The ending in my mind "the captains log" as a "soggy deed to the sea" can be seen as this poem itself, wherby embracing the whole "void", the ocean expanse the poet owns that experience, by recording it. Inspired and moving. |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 12/23/06 at 11:17 PM A masterful reflection from this bowsprit - every word! |
| Posted by Michelle Angelini on 12/24/06 at 01:42 AM In these lines, you pull the world around you into your own sphere, yet give obeisance to nature, the sea, and the universe. And each word shows a part of nature as it relates to humanity and where you are in the scheme of things. With motion, color, perspective, reverence, and serenity, the image you seek to create is an indelible one in the reader's mind. I can hear the wind snap the sails, see the schools of fish, hear even the things that aren't mentioned like the buoys, see the immensity of the sea with the vessel as one tiny "speck" on it. Your words awaken the each of the five senses.
~Chelle~ |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 12/24/06 at 02:06 AM Concise but very descriptive! Get the feel and the sense of the sea! |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 12/24/06 at 04:32 PM Wonderful poem Jadi! Rich in imagery, easily standing out as concrete and metaphor alike Captain! |
| Posted by Charles E Minshall on 12/31/06 at 03:16 AM Aye Matey great poem. Brought back fond memories of the sea while reading it...Charlie |
| Posted by Ulyss Rubey on 04/07/07 at 06:04 PM If I had words to express the visions and feelings this poem evokes I too would be a poet. |
| Posted by Glenn Currier on 08/22/07 at 02:59 AM you pitch and yaw me... and just when i thought i was set on a sure course... |
| Posted by Meghan Helmich on 12/31/08 at 07:25 PM i get sea sick >.< but this makes it sound wonderful. |
| Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 06/05/10 at 12:21 PM snappy and acute every word and punctual and never tardy befitting a consistent art fitting in itself to be divided or multiplied unto the sheer square root of joy. |
| Posted by Michael Faraday on 03/12/11 at 01:44 AM I am but a Grasshopper. enjoyed, m |
| Posted by Meghan Helmich on 09/20/11 at 08:01 PM I really love this title, by the way. |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 02/23/16 at 05:05 PM Congrats on POTD! |
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