Backyard senyru

by Kara Hayostek

Mesmerized by Spring
I didn’t even notice
An onion sprouted


Posted on 03/29/2004
Copyright © 2021 Kara Hayostek

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Rula Shin on 03/29/04 at 09:46 PM

Wow, amazing. How'd you come up with 3 lines so profound in such little time? I suppose it takes a profound creation to evoke such a distinct and beautiful snapshot of the mind "mesmerized" by spring while the body remains 'unaware' of 'a sprouting onion'...she's a tricky Dame that Sping...I've been skipping around and whistling in the office since early afternoon my dear...Nature knows its course and doesn't hesitate to take it :-)

Posted by Ashok Sharda on 03/30/04 at 02:32 PM

'An onion sprouted'? Shall I say congratulations!!! But, whats troubling me is 'unnoticed' to congratulate you straight away.A beautiful minimal.

Posted by Allan Haslinds on 04/01/04 at 03:58 AM

This is my new favorite of your single-breath poems, Loop. It has the natural undertones so commonly found in Eastern poetry, but also has a Western edge to it, in it's reflection of self.

Posted by Maureen Glaude on 04/01/04 at 03:28 PM

wow. the element of surprise growth! I love it. Well done.

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 04/02/04 at 05:40 PM

And oh what one can do with that onion! Thanks for the well worded seasonal reminder Kara.

Posted by Agnes Eva on 08/03/04 at 08:35 PM

I'd say this is haiku, an onion sprouting is more about your moment with nature, than anything that reveals something about human nature with no connection to nature (senryu). I like what this suggests- you are so in tune with the 'big picture' you missed the concrete event of the focused in picture... well until this moment of this haiku of course. I really like it.

Posted by Kyle Anne Kish on 06/04/07 at 01:00 PM

Perhaps the mesmerized spring state you were in included the onion? This is a very nice ku. Congratulations on your POTD, Kara.

Posted by Maria Terezia Ferencz on 06/04/07 at 01:18 PM

Nice tight little piece, well deserved POTD. Congrats!

Posted by Michelle Angelini on 06/04/07 at 09:16 PM

Excellent image, Kara. Gee, I think I can even smell the onion. CONGRATULATIONS on POTD!

Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 03/12/12 at 06:14 PM

it happens all the time or so it seems and so we shouldn't be at all surprised when onions take a back seat to the birth of Spring or even to Love, which onions are said to discourage, and yet those very onions are not so distant relatives to Love as everyone assumes, in that both make you sob uncontrollably long after they've ceased sprouting.

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