[Haiku] Cloud Master

by Rommel Cruz

Cotton candy clouds
Balloon into heaven’s zoo
Childhood fantasy


Author's Note: My first ever haiku. I hope it's not so bad. Thought of this while doing ab crunches at the gym. hahaha

Posted on 05/28/2003
Copyright © 2021 Rommel Cruz

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Anne Engelen on 05/28/03 at 12:33 PM

Balloon into heaven's zoo...cute!! I like

Posted by Alastre Zidler on 05/28/03 at 12:33 PM

Nicely done Rom... very childlike carnival images w/the ballons & cotton candy... "Heaven's zoo" - I like the image! Fun haiku!

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 05/28/03 at 02:06 PM

As a long time cloud watcher, really enjoyed this first trip out of the haiku barn Rommel.

Posted by Jeanne Marie Hoffman on 05/28/03 at 04:42 PM

It makes me think of when I was little and I would stare at the clouds and think that they looked like cotton candy. (my mom thought I was nuts for that) Very descriptive, I like

Posted by Matt Forget on 05/28/03 at 11:51 PM

mmmmm candy made of cotton in the sky....with diamonds???? nice job....although i'm not much of a haiku writer, cuz quite frankly I don't know how....it's very well done and very descriptive...i like it! :)

Posted by Jean Mollett on 05/29/03 at 03:58 AM

Hi Rommel, Looks like it's a hit, very good. I'm working at them too. I found sometimes their not so easy, it really makes ya think about them. Specially when ya rusty on syll's. Hee! Hee! Peace & Joy, Jean

Posted by Jessica Yen on 05/30/03 at 02:55 AM

reminscient of a vintage old photograph with a young kid at the zoo, perfectly content in his cotton candy world. great. :)

Posted by Kara Hayostek on 05/30/03 at 03:27 AM

Love cotton candy, hate crunches...Wonderful haiku, i love cloud watching :-)

Posted by Lacy D Phillips on 05/30/03 at 07:24 AM

That's the great thing about haiku, if you have any inclination to verse at all, they're impossible to screw up. And they're a great excercise of your talent. Trying to tell the maximum story within the rigid format is a challenge to your poetic chops. Lovely image, by the way.

Posted by Mary Ellen Smith on 05/30/03 at 10:24 AM

Wonderful! Playful and light...love it!

Posted by Melissa Arel on 05/30/03 at 03:09 PM

what a yummy haiku! good job, Romm :)

Posted by Christina Bruno on 06/01/03 at 06:49 AM

very sweet...i love cotton candy :)

Posted by JD Clay on 06/05/03 at 03:40 AM

Nice work with the ethereal verse, Rommel. This could be the start of something big. Peace...

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 07/24/17 at 02:41 AM

Excellent poem Rommel. Congrats on POTD!

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