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Cajun Queen

by Ken Harnisch

Deep and dreary is the swamp

I swim to reach you

Though you gave me a map of the bayou

You somehow forgot to mention

The copper mouths clinging to the

Limbs, or the gators, hungering in the

Muddy sun for morsels sweet as me

I should castigate you for that,

I suppose, you thinking

If I’m fool enough

To swim my way to your

Doorstep, and if I get past the

Spiders and snakes, well, hell,

I’ve got half a chance with you

 

So far you’re worth the adventure

And so far I’ve avoided any quicksand

But I wonder why you smile so

While waiting in the shade

And if, in sphinx-like silence

You stand there at the rail

Knowing the roots and mangroves

That I’m stumbling on

Are the bleached white bones

Of those who’ve swam to you before

 

02/26/2003

Author's Note: Once again, thanks Melissa...this time for much-appreciated editorial support

Posted on 02/27/2003
Copyright © 2021 Ken Harnisch

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Melissa Arel on 02/27/03 at 05:16 PM

You're welcome Ken ;-) You're the one who wrote it, I just gave you a pre-critiquing. Another great one!

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 02/27/03 at 05:58 PM

LOL! Sounds like a few of the gals I've known over the years. Great anology Ken.

Posted by Charles E Minshall on 03/01/03 at 04:02 AM

Boy she sure does play hard to get..Fun poem..Ken...Charlie

Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 03/01/03 at 11:23 AM

No facades presented here. complete reveation. stripped down to bleached bones. Well, if that isn't showing her what you're made of. at least it's a glad addition to her bone collection. Wonderful Work Ken.

Posted by Kate Demeree on 03/03/03 at 01:21 PM

*soft smile* I must say that this is a wonderful piece! Beautifly written and edited! I love Debs comment... wish I had made it..

Posted by Kate Demeree on 03/03/03 at 01:23 PM

Forgot to add to my comment that half a chance is alot better than no chance at all!

Posted by Glenn Currier on 03/12/03 at 11:58 PM

Being of Cajun extract and having known a few of those "worth the adventure" women, I have a special appreciation for this one, my friend. Reminds me of the last time I passed through the Atchafalia basin and felt its mystery and danger.

Posted by Max Bouillet on 07/09/03 at 05:37 PM

Turn back... I'm sure you could find someone a little less dangerous!!! Great imagery --I felt as though I was there.

Posted by Shayla R Cakes on 08/28/03 at 07:14 AM

very nice!!

Posted by Kris Mara on 04/23/09 at 12:23 PM

powerful determination -- written so cleanly here -- I like that in your style, you get your point across so well -- and that ending is incredible.

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