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Cajun Queen
by Ken HarnischDeep and dreary is the swamp
I swim to reach you
Though you gave me a map of the bayou
You somehow forgot to mention
The copper mouths clinging to the
Limbs, or the gators, hungering in the
Muddy sun for morsels sweet as me
I should castigate you for that,
I suppose, you thinking
If Im fool enough
To swim my way to your
Doorstep, and if I get past the
Spiders and snakes, well, hell,
Ive got half a chance with you
So far youre worth the adventure
And so far Ive avoided any quicksand
But I wonder why you smile so
While waiting in the shade
And if, in sphinx-like silence
You stand there at the rail
Knowing the roots and mangroves
That Im stumbling on
Are the bleached white bones
Of those whove swam to you before
02/26/2003 Author's Note: Once again, thanks Melissa...this time for much-appreciated editorial support
Posted on 02/27/2003
Copyright © 2024 Ken Harnisch
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Melissa Arel on 02/27/03 at 05:16 PM You're welcome Ken ;-) You're the one who wrote it, I just gave you a pre-critiquing. Another great one! |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 02/27/03 at 05:58 PM LOL! Sounds like a few of the gals I've known over the years. Great anology Ken. |
| Posted by Charles E Minshall on 03/01/03 at 04:02 AM Boy she sure does play hard to get..Fun poem..Ken...Charlie |
| Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 03/01/03 at 11:23 AM No facades presented here. complete reveation. stripped down to bleached bones. Well, if that isn't showing her what you're made of. at least it's a glad addition to her bone collection. Wonderful Work Ken. |
| Posted by Kate Demeree on 03/03/03 at 01:21 PM *soft smile* I must say that this is a wonderful piece! Beautifly written and edited! I love Debs comment... wish I had made it.. |
| Posted by Kate Demeree on 03/03/03 at 01:23 PM Forgot to add to my comment that half a chance is alot better than no chance at all! |
| Posted by Glenn Currier on 03/12/03 at 11:58 PM Being of Cajun extract and having known a few of those "worth the adventure" women, I have a special appreciation for this one, my friend. Reminds me of the last time I passed through the Atchafalia basin and felt its mystery and danger. |
| Posted by Max Bouillet on 07/09/03 at 05:37 PM Turn back... I'm sure you could find someone a little less dangerous!!! Great imagery --I felt as though I was there. |
| Posted by Shayla R Cakes on 08/28/03 at 07:14 AM very nice!! |
| Posted by Kris Mara on 04/23/09 at 12:23 PM powerful determination -- written so cleanly here -- I like that in your style, you get your point across so well -- and that ending is incredible. |
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