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A Light-Hearted Look at My Lunacy

by Kristine Briese

I've lost another marble
    I'm quite sorry to say.
I hate to have to tell you
    it's the second one today.
The first one's in the belfry
    where the bats are raising heck;
They want to play a card game
    but I haven't a full deck.
The second marble left me
    as quick as it could vamoose;
It went to find a new home
    that doesn't have a screw loose.
My few remaining marbles
    are surely soon to roam,
And although they'll leave the light on
    there will be nobody home.
So if you find my marbles
    or you've got a few to spare,
Please ship them off to Bedlam--
    they're sure to find me there!

   

04/04/2002

Posted on 04/04/2002
Copyright © 2021 Kristine Briese

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Holly H Dunne on 10/03/02 at 01:14 PM

hey kristine. i really loved this poem, it was a little bit different and really refreshing. i can relate to it, i just recently was realeased from a psychiatric ward and am still seeing my pscho therapist. was good to read soemthign that threw a different slant on it. hope you're doing good. xx

Posted by Lori I Wolfe on 10/29/02 at 05:10 PM

LOL! I love this ... I can really relate to it!!! =-)

Posted by Charles J Hannan on 10/30/02 at 04:30 PM

Good one, Kristine!....I feel this way often...lol..too often!..MUAHS

Posted by Cathlyn Cartier on 11/01/02 at 04:14 PM

I haven't seen your marbles, and haven't any to spare. I've lost quite a few myself, if you should happen to see them (in all shades of purple, blue and green), would you set them aside for me? I really loved this poem!

Posted by Anne Howe on 11/20/02 at 10:54 PM

sorry...saw a couple roll by..didn't realise they were yours ........... a wonderful poem

Posted by Rusty C Arquette on 12/22/02 at 04:06 AM

I'm renting a lovely room at the phunnie pharm myself..great view! - Too close to home! LOL! - RCat

Posted by Ann Krischus on 03/12/03 at 07:13 PM

I really enjoy your writing.

Posted by Agnes Eva on 04/11/03 at 07:20 PM

heheh! the poem is all that the title promises. great ditty.

Posted by Don Coffman on 08/21/03 at 07:45 AM

Very amusing with a solid, classic form and rhyme. Really well done. :)

Posted by Ken Harnisch on 08/22/03 at 07:28 AM

the first four lines caught me and i slipped on my marbles and fell down and have been laughing ruefully ever since..nice, nutty departure

Posted by Rachelle Howe on 09/02/03 at 05:30 PM

*DIES LAUGHING* this is so freaking awesome. i seriously wish i would have written it. i hate rhyme most of the time (heh heh. catch the pun? i rock) but in this case, it suits it.

Posted by JD Clay on 05/19/04 at 03:35 AM

Touchy subject, clever approach. Your ever present, sharpened wit proves that this amazing piece is nowhere near autobiographical. Bedlam? I love it. Pe4ce...

Posted by Mike Loftis on 08/30/04 at 02:57 PM

Absolutely a kick. Loved it.

Posted by John Nivel on 06/19/05 at 01:38 PM

The trick to not losing one's marbles is to have all cat's eye marbles! They find its owner, if lost.

Posted by Dave Fitzgerald on 08/01/05 at 06:31 PM

I liked this a lot, made me smile and that's always a good thing eh?

Posted by Laura Doom on 05/30/07 at 11:19 PM

So - what's the problem with clichs then?
(Don't answer that :)

Posted by Meghan Helmich on 06/10/08 at 08:17 PM

i'm rarely amused by rhymes. congrats, you managed it :)

Posted by Michael Smith on 07/30/09 at 08:02 PM

Your charm and playful nature is well exhibited in this work, Kristine. You certainly got a chuckle out of me! I especially liked your word-choice of "vamoose."

Posted by Carol Grant on 08/07/10 at 12:26 AM

Oh my I loved this...so easy to read and understand. Too phunnie, I laughed right out loud.

If you get to bedlam before me would you look for about 50 light orange marbles with white in the middle. Those would be mine and I really need them. [chuckles]

Posted by Angela Stevens on 08/15/11 at 09:09 PM

This was great to read and made me smile. One for the favourites!

Posted by Tony Whitaker on 01/02/12 at 10:07 AM

Ok, Ok, Ok! This one goes into my favorites list. How in the heck did I ever miss your work? A very funny poesie on a very serious subject. 25 years ago my psychiatrist would have gotten a kick out of this. But I got over my depression and sometimes forget it is good to bleed, especially for a writer of songs and poetry which I use to be much better at(Sorry for the dangling preposition)! HAHAHA!

Posted by Angela Stevens on 04/14/13 at 02:16 PM

I loved reading this again after so long! :)

Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 01/17/15 at 01:39 PM

marbles are overrated, albeit I give this ode and the heart it took to write it the highest rating.

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 02/24/15 at 03:47 PM

This is hilarious! Glad to have read it. Creative and whimsical. Congrats on POTD!

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 02/24/15 at 06:08 PM

Congratulations on POTD Kristine. Long overdue and well deserved! :)

Posted by Ken Harnisch on 02/24/15 at 09:32 PM

Congrats on POTD, Kristine! This poem is marble-ous, simply marble-ous!

Posted by Rob Littler on 03/03/15 at 04:35 AM

marbles tend to roll downhill

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