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Balloon

by Kristina Woodhill

thank god I knew you
when
spontaneity ruled your every inhale
filled you
like a huge
floating parade balloon of notions
and we followed,
grabbing at your string
with laughter, on our tippy toes,
as eager children
followed the pied piper

you were fun, free, future seeing
even while focused on the moment
colors brighter
sunshine days
nights lit up by river parade's
seamless flowing magic
we took them all in
companions, shoulder to shoulder

smiles miles wide

you fell in love one summer
i'd never seen a balloon popped
so fast, as friends go
and you saw to it
that we went
it was past understanding
jetissoned
from the basket
hot air pushing us in all directions
but mostly away

to watch you become
a careful person
cautious
nervous
distant
how could love do that to anyone
surely there is still a spark in your eye
but the fire we all shared
has been snuffed
like a cold wind jealously
hugging wet winter logs

12/28/2013

Author's Note: answer to Philip's challenge - use the word spontaneity , written in one sitting

Posted on 12/28/2013
Copyright © 2020 Kristina Woodhill

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by George Hoerner on 12/29/13 at 12:26 AM

I much more prefer spontaneity to 'sex at 2pm on Sunday. Either works but I mean come on!

Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 12/29/13 at 12:44 PM

and you have risen marvelously to the challenge, Kristina with an ode spontaneously combusting with such fueling lines such as ---- future seeing even while focused on the moment ---- to watch you become a careful person, cautious, nervous, distant, how could love do that to anyone?

Posted by Veronica Phoenics on 12/29/13 at 07:23 PM

You paint a vibrant picture of your thoughts here, i instantly 'saw' the balloon, the friends mesmerised and jaunting along by the string, and the implications followed quickly in my mind and remained, following the trail for the rest of the poem with its many beautiful, rhythmic lines. Super write!

Posted by Alison McKenzie on 12/29/13 at 09:06 PM

What a wonderful rise to that occasion!The last two lines finish this very effectively.

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 12/29/13 at 09:43 PM

Excellent response to the challenge, Kristina.

Posted by Laura Doom on 12/31/13 at 07:55 PM

Fiction, friction, English Lit--I like your altitude...

Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 01/02/14 at 04:28 PM

Spontaneous response in writing brings spontaneity to a new level. Symbolism excellent.

Posted by Britt Zimmerman on 01/18/14 at 04:33 PM

How beautiful! This is now one of my faves!!

Posted by Sam Roberts on 03/02/14 at 11:34 PM

wonderful flow, you write so eloquently!

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