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Anatomical Display
by Dan LinnHe found himself always walking the line,
between utterly ridiculous and nearly sublime.
He was very addicted to shining sharp edges,
and windswept steps and suicide ledges.
So when it happened, the inevitable fall,
the edge cut him cleanly with no death at all.
What everyone saw, made them turn away,
like some scientific anatomical display,
Muscles exposed, bones poking about,
Emotionally, terminally, turned inside out,
all of his insides are flayed out to see,
and now I think that it's happened to me. 08/12/2010 Author's Note: This was an idea taken from bodies cut to display a variety composite tissues.
Posted on 02/23/2012
Copyright © 2024 Dan Linn
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Paganini Jones on 02/23/12 at 11:19 AM You have a good mastery of rhyme - often it can intrude / impede the flow, but here every word feels specifically chosen and in the right place.
This is a gem of a line: Emotionally, terminally, turned inside out
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| Posted by LK Barrett on 02/23/12 at 09:34 PM Great meter, and again...I adore your eye for imagery and mind for extended metaphor. TY for another superb write, even if it did leave you a bit exposed...LK |
| Posted by Jody Pratt on 02/25/12 at 12:14 AM Your style here reminds me of how I write (sometimes). Though the subject matter is less up my alley. Wonderfully expressed! |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 02/25/12 at 03:04 AM Excellent poetic reminder of how we (all) sometimes see ourselves...spliced open in front of an auditorium of medical students. Though of course this piece goes much deeper and further, as you aptly take it down to a persoal story and level. Glad I had a chance to read it. Kudos! |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 02/25/12 at 04:04 PM This makes me want to read more, to see what explodes or flies off to somewhere next. The meter is terrific. I guess there is a amazing Bodies exhibit touring the country. "the edge cut him cleanly with no death at all." - my favorite line. Thanks for this unique read. |
| Posted by Shannon McEwen on 02/25/12 at 10:02 PM fantastic, it flows off of my tongue so smoothly when I read it out loud, vivid images too, particulary when you added info with your note. |
| Posted by Morgan D Hafele on 02/26/12 at 09:38 PM the first stanza sticks out for me, but when read with the other 2 it kind of feels like walking through the bodies exhibition. great write. |
| Posted by Frankie Sanchez on 02/29/12 at 01:10 AM I really dig this. |
| Posted by Rob Littler on 03/02/12 at 06:29 PM I am out of breath at the last line. To me, too. Witnessing the about become, because nearly dead might as well be. Being, having been. |
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