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Lifetimes Without You

by Lori Blair

Lifetimes without you

forever till the end

the earth is a gloomy stain

never reaching to befriend



as long as these hours accord

it's so hard to understand

the truth was as we wanted it to be

they tell me I don't comprehend



but



beauty was engaging

within eyes that relent

we just lived as we wanted to

never imagining an end



and I try to tell myself

what I wished to be the end

forever the truth is; you and me

as soulmate and not as friend



cuz I still miss you





and while,



memories have faded

what was red then now pink

defended my own honor

cuz this heart never failed to think




but guilty from pleasure

from those times of before

it will always be enough

if that is all, and nothing more




but I still miss you




and so



lifetimes without you

forever till the end

the earth is a gloomy stain

never reaching to befriend




as long as these hours accord

it's so hard to understand

the truth was as we wanted it to be

they tell me I don't comprehend



but I still miss you



even so

even so



oh, even so, I miss you

11/29/2011

Posted on 11/30/2011
Copyright © 2021 Lori Blair

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Ken Harnisch on 11/30/11 at 01:40 PM

Says it all, Lori...says it all. I am in silent awe.

Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 11/30/11 at 03:37 PM

This really leaves you knocked out at the end. Those last few lines? Outstanding.

Posted by JJ Johnson on 11/30/11 at 07:41 PM

The earth is a gloomy stain indeed and reaches into infinity. Forever lonliness is a feeling I know well. Not to get too sidetracked, but this poem reminded me of a recent PBS NOVA program that supports my theory of time. All moments in time and space exist simaltaniously and our conscious minds simply travel through the dimensions in a linear fashion, unable to alter what has already been experienced or what will be through the natural course of events. Everything has happened exactly how it was meant to happen, no matter how much one may wish otherwise, only chaos can alter events yet to come. But as chaos is unpredictable by it's very nature, there is no way to plan for the unexpected and determine the final result. So the best that one can hope for is for chaos itself to randomly smile on ones destiny and end the forever till the end of living without you. jj

Posted by Joe Cramer on 12/01/11 at 12:48 AM

... excellent, as always.....

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 12/01/11 at 02:19 AM

The title says it all, and captures that tease of time, in how we seemingly travel across oceans of it, and yet at the same time...stand still. Spacing and lyricism as always, well done. Lori, you've definetely carved out a unique niche in the poetry universe, with plenty of energy and enthusiasm in the craft to keep even the most fickle of readers interested.

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 12/01/11 at 03:42 AM

You have an innate talent for phrasing and I get the feeling you love with gusto. I hope the memories remain in a healthy place as you move on to new relationships and experiences.

Posted by Jody Pratt on 12/01/11 at 07:30 AM

Congrats on your poem hitting number 1!

Posted by Glenn Currier on 12/01/11 at 05:01 PM

You capture in such a whimsical yet stirring way the enduring feelings of a complex and penetrating relationship. You had me weaving in and out of the heart of this. Thanks.

Posted by Laura Doom on 12/06/11 at 11:10 AM

This lyric sings it all, with a voice that rings out melancholy in vivid colours...

Posted by Morgan D Hafele on 12/07/11 at 09:43 PM

this is musical. absolutely wonderful!

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