|Member Comments on this Poem|
|Posted by Mo Couts on 10/12/11 at 09:17 AM|
Your last line absolutely stopped me in my tracks. Sad poem, with so much beauty due to the weight of it's truth. Nicely done.
|Posted by Joe Cramer on 10/12/11 at 01:10 PM|
|Posted by Alison McKenzie on 10/12/11 at 01:39 PM|
Timely and intelligent! Nice to see you writing Lori!
|Posted by Charlie Morgan on 10/12/11 at 02:54 PM|
I am a-grin from seeing your name, love you, missed you annnnnd missed you[r] posts...this was more than a Ginsberg-Dylan marriage. a heavy rightous write.
|Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 10/12/11 at 09:55 PM|
The way this builds to a voice that almost comes off like a whisper is just brilliant.
|Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 10/13/11 at 02:04 AM|
Certainly captures the social spirit of our times. Not only in America, but Canada, and the rest of the world too. Good to read you again Lori, and continued success with your writing. :)
|Posted by James Zealy on 10/13/11 at 03:30 AM|
At your lyrical best, You tone is this even in social commentary. There is music that plays notes and delivers such honesty in a way that has us singing like Woody Guthrie. Thanks again Lori.
|Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 10/19/11 at 01:47 AM|
Your aim is true as ever. Delighted. Thanks.
|Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 10/19/11 at 02:52 AM|
This rings with sad contemporary truths; you do not let us or yourself off the hook here, Lori. I like this challenge given, the refrain's needling us in a new direction. Great to read you again.
|Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 10/19/11 at 06:19 PM|
Challenging commentary on our times. Well, this nation (USA) has so turned from the ONE, and we have been left in a terrible confusion! World-wide state
will come but at a terrible cost to freedom I believe.
|Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 11/04/11 at 01:55 PM|
the tragedy and the topic and scope of where we all are dwelling at present was never in better hands to relay gently to our eyes. such as is your gift moving along and scrolling down the papyrus offers us all hope, that we shall as well dwell in the morrow as in the now.
|Posted by Ronald A Pavellas on 11/27/11 at 02:55 AM|
I am learning from your poetry.
|Posted by Bertram Sparagmos on 10/20/12 at 03:32 PM|
The constant pull of the human nature between rugged, selfish individualism and emotional, thinking pack animal reflects itself in society as well. The tone, pace, and choice of subject matter to express the 'thesis' was great.
|Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 02/27/13 at 03:50 PM|
Really fine to read this one again. Congrats on POTD!