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Carnival

by Clara Mae Gregory

World spins
out of control,
revolving
into a carnival.

Feasts of Fetish-
Delights of sins-
Masquerade masks
with nightmare grins.

Lick the wishbones.
Festivals fed
convivial clones-
Day of the Dead.

Preceded by Lent,
is the true carnival-
*removal of flesh*
Redemption of soul.

03/15/2011

Author's Note: This has been revised once and is a repost. I am not writing as prolifically as I had been(I am blocked right now), so now I am focusing back on my work, with revision in mind. But in this case,I just like this and so does Maria and Julie. Maybeeeee someone else will too....and I am open to suggestions or ideas on possible further revision. I was thinking of removing the word "is" in the 3rd line from the bottom. *OH! I KNOW why this may not have been well received...but if I say it...someone 'MIGHT' be offended. *For those who want to improve their understanding(vocab): convivial   –adjective [and if U don't know what "LENT" is, look it up, good grief] 1. friendly; agreeable: a convivial atmosphere. 2. fond of feasting, drinking, and merry company; jovial. 3. of or befitting a feast; festive.
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I AM YANKING YOUR CHAIN!(if u allow me to)

Posted on 03/16/2011
Copyright © 2020 Clara Mae Gregory

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by James Zealy on 03/16/11 at 04:42 PM

Tug tug

Posted by Johnny Crimson on 03/17/11 at 11:51 AM

Yank away Clara.. Heeeh hee. I like this peice you've got here. "Feasts of Fetish- Delights of sins- Masquerade masks with nightmare grins." Gets me all tingly inside. It sounds like the opening of some nightmarish play or a film Tim Burton has yet to animate. I really like this. It's going on my favorites. Tah tahh......

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 03/17/11 at 04:11 PM

I like it all, but especially the "Lick the wishbones" line!

Posted by Charlie Morgan on 03/26/11 at 07:55 PM

...a rather beautiful wonderful-crazy expression of the you i know, yet you out-stepped your self. left me with a floating feeling, that cute, that manifesting.

Posted by Charlie Morgan on 03/26/11 at 08:01 PM

...please see my use of "manifesting" in a traditional-not new wave. i see it as the power/wisdom to make yourself better with application WITH THE GRACE OF GOD.

Posted by Glenn Currier on 03/26/11 at 11:13 PM

There is a carnival of light and dark here - you had my imagination traveling to Mexico and New Orleans and Brazil. I read all of the contradictions in our human celebrations, in our coping with the life cycle. Thanks for the thought-provoking piece, Mel.

Posted by Sam Richmond on 04/27/11 at 03:17 PM

Dear Clara; I like the poem as is. I do like to "GRAB" the reader with the title sometimes though... so ... I'd suggest 'Karnival' just for your consideration. Sam

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 06/21/16 at 02:40 PM

Good to see this as POTD! Congrats!

Posted by George Hoerner on 06/21/16 at 09:38 PM

I had not really read this before so I'm glad it made POTD! I like it a lot. I think we should probably all think about looking at our writing with an eye toward revision. It may be the one healthy think about reading our own poetry!!

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 06/23/16 at 03:09 AM

I apparently rated this (Brilliant) when it first came out, but didn't comment. As you would say ***STELLAR*** CM. :D

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