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Carnival
by Clara Mae GregoryWorld spins
out of control,
revolving
into a carnival.
Feasts of Fetish-
Delights of sins-
Masquerade masks
with nightmare grins.
Lick the wishbones.
Festivals fed
convivial clones-
Day of the Dead.
Preceded by Lent,
is the true carnival-
*removal of flesh*
Redemption of soul.
03/15/2011 Author's Note: This has been revised once and is a repost. I am not writing as prolifically as I had been(I am blocked right now), so now I am focusing back on my work, with revision in mind. But in this case,I just like this and so does Maria and Julie. Maybeeeee someone else will too....and I am open to suggestions or ideas on possible further revision. I was thinking of removing the word "is" in the 3rd line from the bottom. *OH! I KNOW why this may not have been well received...but if I say it...someone 'MIGHT' be offended.
*For those who want to improve their understanding(vocab):
convivial –adjective [and if U don't know what "LENT" is, look it up, good grief]
1. friendly; agreeable: a convivial atmosphere.
2. fond of feasting, drinking, and merry company; jovial.
3. of or befitting a feast; festive.
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I AM YANKING YOUR CHAIN!(if u allow me to)
Posted on 03/16/2011
Copyright © 2024 Clara Mae Gregory
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by James Zealy on 03/16/11 at 04:42 PM Tug tug |
| Posted by Johnny Crimson on 03/17/11 at 11:51 AM Yank away Clara.. Heeeh hee. I like this peice you've got here.
"Feasts of Fetish-
Delights of sins-
Masquerade masks
with nightmare grins." Gets me all tingly inside. It sounds like the opening of some nightmarish play or a film Tim Burton has yet to animate. I really like this. It's going on my favorites. Tah tahh......
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| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 03/17/11 at 04:11 PM I like it all, but especially the "Lick the wishbones" line! |
| Posted by Charlie Morgan on 03/26/11 at 07:55 PM ...a rather beautiful wonderful-crazy expression of the you i know, yet you out-stepped your self. left me with a floating feeling, that cute, that manifesting. |
| Posted by Charlie Morgan on 03/26/11 at 08:01 PM ...please see my use of "manifesting" in a traditional-not new wave. i see it as the power/wisdom to make yourself better with application WITH THE GRACE OF GOD. |
| Posted by Glenn Currier on 03/26/11 at 11:13 PM There is a carnival of light and dark here - you had my imagination traveling to Mexico and New Orleans and Brazil. I read all of the contradictions in our human celebrations, in our coping with the life cycle. Thanks for the thought-provoking piece, Mel. |
| Posted by Sam Richmond on 04/27/11 at 03:17 PM Dear Clara;
I like the poem as is. I do like to "GRAB" the reader with the title sometimes though... so ... I'd suggest 'Karnival' just for your consideration.
Sam |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 06/21/16 at 02:40 PM Good to see this as POTD! Congrats! |
| Posted by George Hoerner on 06/21/16 at 09:38 PM I had not really read this before so I'm glad it made POTD! I like it a lot. I think we should probably all think about looking at our writing with an eye toward revision. It may be the one healthy think about reading our own poetry!! |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 06/23/16 at 03:09 AM I apparently rated this (Brilliant) when it first came out, but didn't comment. As you would say ***STELLAR*** CM. :D |
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