Member Comments on this Poem |
Posted by Morgan D Hafele on 03/03/11 at 06:57 PM jeez. maybe we should just do away with cars all together. it seems like it would be rather hard to not see a school bus. i really like the way you put this together |
Posted by Linda Fuller on 03/03/11 at 11:13 PM I was glad to see in your author's comment that this was a minor crash - when reading your poem, I pictured more carnage. I also like the construction of this. |
Posted by Clara Mae Gregory on 03/04/11 at 12:32 AM Thankfully indeed! I was almost set to read the worst.....the way it was sounding....what a relief....and very well expressed, Kristina. |
Posted by George Hoerner on 03/04/11 at 01:44 PM This is really a very nice write lady, regardless of the seriousness of the subject or maybe because of it. |
Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 03/04/11 at 05:14 PM Yes, I'm relieved too that it wasn't fatal as hinted at in the line 4MY 4GRLS. Fascinating capture as seen through your eyes and ears Kristina. :o)
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Posted by Max Bouillet on 03/07/11 at 02:54 AM The imagery in this was like a woven nightmare. The colors and the emotion mixed with horror of flashing lights and impact. Great climatic advances on your stanzas! |
Posted by Glenn Currier on 03/08/11 at 07:10 PM Whew! Thanks for the author's note. At the end of this my stomach was all tight with dread. Your lines punch and jab and awaken. Thanks a bunch Kristina. |
Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 04/08/11 at 12:03 PM Powerful description. Made me want to say, "Oh, no! Ouch!" and shudder. |