| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Michael Smith on 01/16/10 at 01:47 AM Powerful, and made eerie and prophetic by your rhyming scheme. |
| Posted by Christel Crews on 01/16/10 at 03:21 AM wow. what power and force in this, and written beautifully. hope all is well with you. |
| Posted by Therese Elaine on 01/16/10 at 07:55 PM Michael is quite right -the way this sort of chants itself through my brain makes it that much more intense and eerie...it's rather chilling the way you put this together and I love the impact that it makes! |
| Posted by Joe Cramer on 01/16/10 at 10:09 PM ... wow... words fail..... |
| Posted by Tony Whitaker on 01/17/10 at 05:35 AM Very cool Clara! |
| Posted by A. Paige White on 01/17/10 at 04:22 PM Very powerfully and thoughtfully written. Glad to add the highest ratings to it I can choose from. Reads like it's lubricated with dripping tears. |
| Posted by Amie Golda on 01/18/10 at 07:16 AM "that lets the words twistings reign"--->this says it all. Brilliant. |
| Posted by Allison Smith on 01/18/10 at 10:56 AM "the penetrating knife proclaims.
But never can erase the pain"
love it. |
| Posted by Julie Adams on 01/18/10 at 11:37 AM a very powerful and penetrating piece...the rhyme is almost sinister in nature, jabbing again and again, like the knife...well done, poet...ur words do resonate, peace, jewels |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 01/19/10 at 04:43 PM That persistent end-of-line rhyme pattern punches this one home. Loved the "words twistings" - ouch!! |
| Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 01/20/10 at 06:36 PM Like Therese wrote... intense and a solid impact.
Seems as though this poem got plucked in the throat. How ironic. |
| Posted by Laura Doom on 01/20/10 at 08:12 PM The title has interesting physiological/metaphoric overtones, and the final line imparts its internal twist with great rhythmic effect. Perhaps not sweet, but definitely not short on impact :>
Does it even fulfil its own prophesy... |
| Posted by Joan Serratelli on 01/29/10 at 05:57 PM You said a great deal with an economy of words. Excellent write- good images! |
| Posted by Rula Shin on 06/05/10 at 01:52 AM Yes, one can 'cut the throat' but the thought remains. This piece is well written, dark and biting. |
| Posted by Glenn Currier on 07/31/10 at 03:23 PM You make vivid and penetrating the way words twistings can cut. I agree that the rhymes add to the impact and evoke the feel of twisting. Thanks, Mel. |
| Posted by June Labyzon on 09/19/10 at 04:22 PM short but sweet, as revenge can only be....loved this, eerie, poignant....to the point. |
| Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 10/22/10 at 12:44 PM this is powerhouse and contemplative stuff, Melanie. the sheer electrical pull and charge and tug of it torrents the mind. |
