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teeth

by Elizabeth Jill




           



     


 

I remember the day
I found her tooth

that vacant lot
that tired overturned earth

there were four-o'clocks
encircling her    spiraling eternities

I took this pearl   her tooth
thumbed it into my palm

closed it around   she's safe now

and I walked   back to the road where it all started

Her tooth will be my teeth now.

I turned back to look

the four-o'clocks were lower now
covering recently tousled soil

four-o'clocks   nodding back to me in
       benediction






10/08/2009

Posted on 10/08/2009
Copyright © 2024 Elizabeth Jill

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Charlie Morgan on 10/09/09 at 03:39 AM

...eeelizabeth jill, comin' outa chute no. 1...lemme say the same wow that dan'l did...what a gem and like he says ditto, underlining the space thingee...a masterful and affective pome, i can see her and you in the shine of that tooth, oh and to when you're diggin' i see your soul. a lovely tribute to the lil' girl in all of us.

Posted by Jo Halliday on 10/09/09 at 07:01 AM

What's always stunning is the happiness! If I would have written this, besides being an angrier and poorer cousin, it would have been tragic. I like the color of this poem.

Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 10/09/09 at 06:32 PM

This is off any personal scale I have, of what is poetic, without being over-the-top. This is a gem, Jill! It's like a keepsake both as a poem and a little living entity, as a memory and artifact: a memory committed to the soul by our inner "scribe", forever. Thanks.

Posted by Glenn Currier on 10/10/09 at 02:13 PM

In wonder, I follow your steps into that place and watch your tender mercy, your hand closing around that earthly evidence of an eternal spark.

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 10/10/09 at 10:48 PM

Loved the "spiraling eternities" and of course, this masterful line - "Her tooth will be my teeth now." You take a simple act and close your hand around it and there begets a spiritual wand passing and a remembrance secured. Thank you.

Posted by Aaron Michael on 10/12/09 at 03:06 AM

again, you amaze. from spiraling eternities until the end is especially grand, but does not overshadow the beginning, which is key.
masterfully written, my dear friend.

Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 10/12/09 at 03:00 PM

for sooth, these words have me pining to be a tooth and safe in your palm, forming attachments to its heart line.

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 10/16/09 at 03:27 PM

Congrats on POTD! This tooth is safe here, front and center.

Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 10/16/09 at 06:32 PM

Daresay, a potd that has TEETH! I already know I can't each just one....many deserved congrats.

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