Member Comments on this Poem |
Posted by Charlie Morgan on 10/09/09 at 03:39 AM ...eeelizabeth jill, comin' outa chute no. 1...lemme say the same wow that dan'l did...what a gem and like he says ditto, underlining the space thingee...a masterful and affective pome, i can see her and you in the shine of that tooth, oh and to when you're diggin' i see your soul. a lovely tribute to the lil' girl in all of us. |
Posted by Jo Halliday on 10/09/09 at 07:01 AM What's always stunning is the happiness! If I would have written this, besides being an angrier and poorer cousin, it would have been tragic. I like the color of this poem. |
Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 10/09/09 at 06:32 PM This is off any personal scale I have, of what is poetic, without being over-the-top. This is a gem, Jill! It's like a keepsake both as a poem and a little living entity, as a memory and artifact: a memory committed to the soul by our inner "scribe", forever. Thanks. |
Posted by Glenn Currier on 10/10/09 at 02:13 PM In wonder, I follow your steps into that place and watch your tender mercy, your hand closing around that earthly evidence of an eternal spark. |
Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 10/10/09 at 10:48 PM Loved the "spiraling eternities" and of course, this masterful line - "Her tooth will be my teeth now." You take a simple act and close your hand around it and there begets a spiritual wand passing and a remembrance secured. Thank you. |
Posted by Aaron Michael on 10/12/09 at 03:06 AM again, you amaze. from spiraling eternities until the end is especially grand, but does not overshadow the beginning, which is key.
masterfully written, my dear friend. |
Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 10/12/09 at 03:00 PM for sooth, these words have me pining to be a tooth and safe in your palm, forming attachments to its heart line. |
Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 10/16/09 at 03:27 PM Congrats on POTD! This tooth is safe here, front and center. |
Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 10/16/09 at 06:32 PM Daresay, a potd that has TEETH! I already know I can't each just one....many deserved congrats. |