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2:30

by Shannon McEwen

Clear November afternoon
Oddly silent
Except the faint clickety-clack
Of clawed feet
On cold pavement

Fat seagulls
Play hopscotch
Munching on peanut free
Granola bars
Dip their heads in puddles


Peace shattered by the bell
Panicked scatter
Wings take flight
Seconds before
Kids explode from the doors

11/25/2008

Posted on 09/23/2009
Copyright © 2021 Shannon McEwen

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Laurie Blum on 09/23/09 at 03:54 PM

This is such a vivid image! It really provides a perfect glimpse at the exuberance at the ending of a school day! Nicely written Shannon...

Posted by Charlie Morgan on 09/23/09 at 04:00 PM

...shannon, laurie says it all: so neat to be "in" the moment w/ kids...adulthood loses so much freedom...imagery, too cool.

Posted by Timothy Burns on 09/24/09 at 05:31 AM

I second El, I love that line about fat seagulls! What a great poem! Welcome to Pathetic!

Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 09/26/09 at 07:34 AM

powerhouse imagery, Shannon. particularly that last line.

Posted by Jo Halliday on 09/26/09 at 07:20 PM

The whole poem is like a haiku; sharply etches the moment, and says so much.

Posted by William Brunk on 09/30/09 at 09:37 PM

painted very clearly. i could see it all.

Posted by Tony Whitaker on 10/01/09 at 07:17 AM

Hi Shannon, I had to check out your library after commenting on my latest haiku. I clicked on the first, which is this real beauty. I absolutely love the unforced alliteration, simile and imagery use. Keep Writing!!!!

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