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Rain - haiku

by Joe David

rain falls serenely
on the parking lot
the cars do not grow

09/15/2009

Posted on 09/15/2009
Copyright © 2020 Joe David

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Charlie Morgan on 09/15/09 at 09:16 PM

...cool, joe.

Posted by Allison Smith on 09/15/09 at 11:57 PM

hehe nice.

Posted by Joe Cramer on 09/16/09 at 01:06 AM

..... excellent.....

Posted by Jo Halliday on 09/16/09 at 12:34 PM

doesn't qualify as haiku to me.

Posted by A. Paige White on 09/16/09 at 06:28 PM

It may not qualify as haiku, but I'm giving it highest marks... cuz I like it, lots and lots, possibly a parking lot full of lots. Welcome to Pathetic!

Posted by Glenn Currier on 09/17/09 at 02:05 PM

Oh how so cleverly you transform the haiku form as if your ear knew it would take only fifteen syllables AND NO MORE to capture this evocative moment.

Posted by Clara Mae Gregory on 09/19/09 at 01:10 PM

The rain's waste of time should be outlawed as a crime. What a shame for the crops on the plain. I(TRULY)enjoyed this. Thank you for sharing it. Welcome to Pathetic.

Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 09/19/09 at 08:36 PM

well, high kudos! I enjoyed this delightful mind-nthing poem.

Welcome to Pathetic!

Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 09/21/09 at 12:54 AM

Good juxtaposition. Lacks the necessary 17 syllables to be a classical haiku. Use of serenely for a description of a natural phenomena not in the spirit of the best of haiku. But you have caught a moment in nature and its effect (or noneffect).

Posted by Tony Whitaker on 09/23/09 at 02:34 PM

I am most partial to a cool ku!

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 09/23/09 at 06:17 PM

Not a ku, but I think the thought is clever.

Posted by Matthew Sharp on 08/06/14 at 04:20 AM

Nice:)

Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 08/06/14 at 12:33 PM

what a fantastic image of Zen. congratulations on POTD.

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