| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Charlie Morgan on 09/15/09 at 09:16 PM ...cool, joe. |
| Posted by Allison Smith on 09/15/09 at 11:57 PM hehe nice. |
| Posted by Joe Cramer on 09/16/09 at 01:06 AM ..... excellent..... |
| Posted by Jo Halliday on 09/16/09 at 12:34 PM doesn't qualify as haiku to me. |
| Posted by A. Paige White on 09/16/09 at 06:28 PM It may not qualify as haiku, but I'm giving it highest marks... cuz I like it, lots and lots, possibly a parking lot full of lots. Welcome to Pathetic! |
| Posted by Glenn Currier on 09/17/09 at 02:05 PM Oh how so cleverly you transform the haiku form as if your ear knew it would take only fifteen syllables AND NO MORE to capture this evocative moment. |
| Posted by Clara Mae Gregory on 09/19/09 at 01:10 PM The rain's waste of time should be outlawed as a crime. What a shame for the crops on the plain.
I(TRULY)enjoyed this. Thank you for sharing it. Welcome to Pathetic. |
| Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 09/19/09 at 08:36 PM well, high kudos! I enjoyed this delightful mind-nthing poem.
Welcome to Pathetic! |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 09/21/09 at 12:54 AM Good juxtaposition. Lacks the necessary 17 syllables to be a classical haiku. Use of serenely for a description of a natural phenomena not in the spirit of the best of haiku. But you have caught a moment in nature and its effect (or noneffect). |
| Posted by Tony Whitaker on 09/23/09 at 02:34 PM I am most partial to a cool ku! |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 09/23/09 at 06:17 PM Not a ku, but I think the thought is clever. |
| Posted by Matthew Sharp on 08/06/14 at 04:20 AM Nice:) |
| Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 08/06/14 at 12:33 PM what a fantastic image of Zen. congratulations on POTD. |
