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Burned (updated)
by Clara Mae GregoryHolding inside the pain,
hate seethes and sizzles within.
At last she strikes her match,
and pent up emotions inflame,
bursting into an inferno,
roasting her soul's only name,
into a scorching wretch
burned by its unforgiveness.
05/09/2009 Author's Note: *This is about another individual I have observed. It is not about my own emotions....it is about the emotions observed in another...
well, after reading Chris's comments:"prooving that theory in a big way. It defintely works on a superficial level, and makes me want to know more about the person who inspired it, and what led to the state of mind.", I decided to answer. The poem was inspired by my Aunt Jackie,who is my mom's baby sister and happens to be a year and half older than me.She is an interesting character to say the least. We use to be close growing up.I think mental illness took over and screwed up her brain.Anyway, she is now estranged from the rest of the family.It all came to a head when my grandmother died a few years back and after the funeral....things got violent.I have a hard time comprehending hate-filled emotions of this magnitude and tried to imagine it as I wrote this.
Posted on 05/09/2009
Copyright © 2024 Clara Mae Gregory
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Joe Cramer on 05/09/09 at 06:48 PM ... awesome..... |
| Posted by Alison McKenzie on 05/09/09 at 07:59 PM Ouch. That's quite an observation. I hope the girl recovers! |
| Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 05/09/09 at 11:32 PM what insight. |
| Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 05/09/09 at 11:34 PM I like what Alison writes, "I hope that girl recovers". I admire the way you chose the wording in this poem.
Jill |
| Posted by Kris Mara on 05/11/09 at 12:47 PM intense...I love how you've ended this |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 05/12/09 at 03:00 PM This is an intense portrait of what some people do to themselves. |
| Posted by Charlie Morgan on 05/12/09 at 10:53 PM ...had to change pronouns, to a 'he'...cMg a heavy pome re: Everyman. Thoreau's ... quiet desperation [that we all live] i need aloe, scorching but cool write. |
| Posted by Tony Whitaker on 05/14/09 at 12:20 PM Good poetry creates emotion in the reader. This one does it quite well for me. Whoever this person is, I hope they find tranquility. |
| Posted by Mike Loftis on 05/14/09 at 01:26 PM To tell such a large story in so few lines is talent. Excellent work. |
| Posted by Dave Fitzgerald on 05/16/09 at 03:56 PM I have to agree with everyone else. This one crackles. |
| Posted by Joan Serratelli on 01/01/11 at 09:07 PM great work- Again, you have great insight. Glad I read this one |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 01/02/11 at 09:04 PM As Einstein once said (I could be mistaken on the exact quote), "Energy can neither be created nor destroyed, but only passed from one form to another." I think you've succeeded in prooving that theory in a big way. It defintely works on a superficial level, and makes me want to know more about the person who inspired it, and what led to the state of mind. |
| Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 09/17/12 at 11:51 AM this wonderful ode can be a tutor to anyone given to the practice of penting up emotions, which is not a healthy thing to, given it doesn't take much of a spark to set off their fireworks in your face and always at the wrong time and place. |
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