| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Genevieve Sturrock on 03/20/09 at 02:31 PM lovely perspective of a growing child. i love the last stanza. |
| Posted by Razel Davies on 03/20/09 at 04:55 PM Beautiful. The generation's evolution into the last and something new at the same time captured excellently. |
| Posted by Alison McKenzie on 03/20/09 at 05:14 PM Nice generational view, Joan. |
| Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 03/21/09 at 12:48 PM there is so much to love in this poem,
to remind a dad that his own sons and daughter
in fact did grow to be more and more like themselves,
yet not so much to exclude the likes of their mom and pop, their features permit a popping in now and again, to displace a fraction of their own. |
| Posted by JD Clay on 03/21/09 at 02:24 PM I enjoyed the overall structure of this poem and the way it unfolds into a progressive pattern of growth. Being products of our environment we are surely programed by what we see, hear and do. Good stuff, Joan! |
| Posted by Tony Young on 03/21/09 at 10:10 PM This moment in our lives is wonderfull, savour it...the next stage puts them in charge, step on their toes and smile....
Great write Joan, loved it |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 03/22/09 at 12:43 AM You've given a fine connection of children to parents, and then the ultimate individual. You remind me of the joys of watching my kids grow up. Thank you. |
| Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 03/22/09 at 03:41 PM You're getting
to be
more and more
to be
your own person
everyday
This is the most beautiful part about being human.
And my favorite stanza in your poem.
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| Posted by Julie Adams on 03/23/09 at 07:51 PM how tantric, how reverberating, how mirrored...love this, peace, jewels |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 03/23/09 at 08:37 PM Excellent almost playful use of pronouns and rhyme to convey a very serious observation. Adds to favourites. |
