| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 12/04/08 at 02:49 AM Wonderfully, brilliantly done. I love that last line, too. |
| Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 12/04/08 at 02:57 AM Great read, Chris. Time does have a way of putting us in our place. "keeping me small enough to go unnoticed"....I strive everyday to go unnoticed....unlike younger years, when we all loved center stage. Thanks. |
| Posted by Bruce W Niedt on 12/04/08 at 05:06 AM You know how much I love good imagery, and this one really delivers. I'd say more about my favorite parts but they've already been mentioned.... d:-) |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 12/04/08 at 03:55 PM Love the layers in this, the reference to the sea, the meaningful colors, and the last two lines in particular. |
| Posted by Tony Whitaker on 12/05/08 at 09:12 AM Wow. This one takes me to all kinds of places. The imagery and psychic stimulation alone are worth the price of admission. Excellent work! |
| Posted by Graeme Fielden on 12/08/08 at 09:20 AM nice piece of social commentary, Chris, with a lesson of humility... |
| Posted by Glenn Currier on 12/08/08 at 04:26 PM What I like about this one is the way you bundle together in a few cogent lines macro economics, national politics and policy, nature, self reflection, and the "season of giving." Brilliant, indeed! Thanks, Chris. |
| Posted by George Hoerner on 12/08/08 at 04:31 PM Very nice write Chris. So much said in so few words. |
| Posted by Morgan D Hafele on 12/10/08 at 08:54 PM good old current events... these are wild times we're living in. |
| Posted by Charles E Minshall on 12/10/08 at 09:21 PM In this day and age we are all new blood to be taken. Good one Chris...CharMin |
| Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 12/13/08 at 07:02 PM This began and continued through in a spiritual way for me...
I had been away for so long
didn’t even know my own name
soothing soulful authentic |
| Posted by Laura Doom on 12/13/08 at 09:20 PM There are lines here, the full relevance of which I don't pretend to understand, but then I'm sure they make perfect sense to 'those who matter(ed)' :>
As alluded to above, you cover a lot of ground within a relatively few intriguing lines - a substantial and valuable write. |
| Posted by Scott Utley on 12/15/08 at 12:45 AM I feel melancholy reading this -- it is a stunning affirmation of the need to fuel and re-energize.... soul mind body heart. My mood has shifted just within this line I type - Hope - you are a messenger of Hope tonight - and the world looks pretty darn good. Very very generous. |
| Posted by Nancy Ames on 12/19/08 at 11:28 PM Nice one, Chris - expresses very well what so many of us are feeling lately about this too political season. |
| Posted by Colleen Sperry on 02/05/09 at 03:50 PM oh Chris.. I can see why ... it has some fabulous lines..
"but I was home again
zigzaging within that thin blue line
my sanity keeping me small enough
to go unnoticed"
love the line breaks as well as the content! |
