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Escape To Halcyon

by JD Clay

Twelve miles out

    Lahina fades

        Seabirds call my name

Gussets creak

    In baritone

        Moan from deep the whale

Lemurian dawn

    A twist of cloud

        Altruisms only child

Grips the wind I

    Taut the sheets and

        Skim like fish that fly



Posted on 08/19/2008
Copyright © 2021 JD Clay

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Rhiannon Jones on 08/20/08 at 02:08 AM

Superb! You've created a strong sense of motion, and the last 3 lines are perfect.

Posted by Anne Engelen on 08/20/08 at 12:46 PM

What a wonderful escape.

Posted by George Hoerner on 08/20/08 at 02:31 PM

To have sunk beneath the ocean and rise as flying fish, what more could one ask. Nice write.

Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 08/20/08 at 05:06 PM

Poems like this are what I live for to find.

Posted by Charles E Minshall on 08/20/08 at 07:33 PM

Great sailing poem Jadi....CharMin

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 08/20/08 at 11:44 PM

Makes me wish I didn't get seasick. I shall sail away on this poem - beautiful.

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 08/21/08 at 12:42 AM

A poetic painting both beautiful and haunting jadi.

Posted by Anastasia Selby on 08/21/08 at 06:42 PM

I like the image of the sheets and the use of lemurian. nice.

Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 08/21/08 at 07:46 PM

A beautiful escape into the imagination, makes me think of Quentin Blake.

Posted by Wendy Sparling on 08/21/08 at 08:10 PM

You sail like a flying fish, jadi. Your poetry always captures the essence of Nature and my attention. Hugz

Posted by Brian Francis on 08/22/08 at 01:43 PM

Wonderful write! Oh to be sailing again. The peace and tranquility of it all. --bf

Posted by Dave Fitzgerald on 08/23/08 at 01:12 PM

Magical images. Like Rhiannon I loved the last three lines. Perfect.

Posted by Michelle Angelini on 08/24/08 at 07:49 PM

You've taken me on a sailing trip out from Paradise. I can feel the breeze in my hair and feel the salt spray on my skin.

Posted by Anastasia Selby on 10/24/08 at 01:55 AM

I've read this before, and enjoyed reading it again.

Posted by Maria Massarella on 11/02/09 at 08:59 PM

Minutes past seven on this full moon eve poesies call my name. A heartspeak stirs in whispertone sinuates oceans inner. Like a lyricist's rhapsody serenades the divine so my breath in wonder glissades the words of Pe4ce and I Escape to Halcyon.


Posted by Tony Whitaker on 11/07/09 at 06:19 PM

Ah, I see the name Lemuria and this piece feels like a Howard Roark elevation. Brilliant.

Posted by Lori Johnson on 11/16/09 at 10:20 PM

I much prefer Ambien, to each his own, I suppose. LOL It appears the results are the same, which is what matters. ;)

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