| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Coleman Demiurge on 11/09/07 at 04:12 AM The title made me a little nervous at first, but that is all right - the poem is very good. I really liked the lines "Where foraging waterfowl eye us as we play, I daydream the hours at a lonely warehouse, Where more than office supplies are packed away" as well as the final three. It could've been sappy; it could've been clich but it is not; it rises above it... Very nicely done. |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 11/09/07 at 02:00 PM So very romantic and tender! Reads aloud so beautifully. |
| Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 11/10/07 at 03:51 PM Details... of "Eartha and Skybear" roses and "spaghetti sauce", "cottages" and "warehouse" "waterfowl" and "snow" all become characters in your personal mythology here, raise the poem, give it wing emotionally ... "ahead" and "again and again". |
| Posted by Therese Elaine on 11/12/07 at 07:28 PM Very sweet and touching...there are few things more comforting than to wish upon than the smile of someone you love. |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 11/17/07 at 12:10 AM Very warm and personal and just full of vivid imagery. I love the bouquet of roses for a smile, the tangy spagetti sauce as humor (very original!), and I am a sucker for foraging waterfowl along romantic rivers. This fills my senses and makes me lift my glass to you and yours! |
| Posted by Tony Whitaker on 11/17/07 at 08:59 AM Being a sucker for romantic poetry, this is tops today in the parade of poems I have read. The word play adds such a dynamic imbuing this piece with a life of its own! |
| Posted by David R Spellman on 11/18/07 at 12:21 PM Wonderful imagery and sentiment eloquently expressed here. Well done! |
| Posted by Glenn Currier on 11/24/07 at 07:07 PM Ah, that image of being in someone's arms feeling them softly as the snow falling... precious present. Lovely, Chris. |
