| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Coleman Demiurge on 11/09/07 at 04:12 AM The title made me a little nervous at first, but that is all right - the poem is very good. I really liked the lines "Where foraging waterfowl eye us as we play, I daydream the hours at a lonely warehouse, Where more than office supplies are packed away" as well as the final three. It could've been sappy; it could've been cliché, but it is not; it rises above it... Very nicely done. |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 11/09/07 at 02:00 PM So very romantic and tender! Reads aloud so beautifully. |
| Posted by Alisa Js on 11/09/07 at 09:10 PM Thank you for taking on this tender journey inward and allowing us out here to glimpse a part of your heart and soul. Beautifully told, this one is... tugging gently on the reader's heart strings.. aloha to you and yours from out here, under the swaying palms.. alisa ;-) |
| Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 11/10/07 at 03:51 PM Details... of "Eartha and Skybear" roses and "spaghetti sauce", "cottages" and "warehouse" "waterfowl" and "snow" all become characters in your personal mythology here, raise the poem, give it wing emotionally ... "ahead" and "again and again". |
| Posted by Therese Elaine on 11/12/07 at 07:28 PM Very sweet and touching...there are few things more comforting than to wish upon than the smile of someone you love. |
| Posted by Sandy M. Humphrey on 11/13/07 at 10:25 PM Ah :) Cozy, and warm and kittens play as I smile and wish upon my own lovers smile and think of lifetimes of again and again....nice. smh |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 11/17/07 at 12:10 AM Very warm and personal and just full of vivid imagery. I love the bouquet of roses for a smile, the tangy spagetti sauce as humor (very original!), and I am a sucker for foraging waterfowl along romantic rivers. This fills my senses and makes me lift my glass to you and yours! |
| Posted by Tony Whitaker on 11/17/07 at 08:59 AM Being a sucker for romantic poetry, this is tops today in the parade of poems I have read. The word play adds such a dynamic imbuing this piece with a life of its own! |
| Posted by David R Spellman on 11/18/07 at 12:21 PM Wonderful imagery and sentiment eloquently expressed here. Well done! |
| Posted by Marjorie Anne Reagan on 11/20/07 at 08:19 PM Reminds me of a snowday off from school with my first boyfriend. Snowy and sunny. Beautiful Chris! |
| Posted by Glenn Currier on 11/24/07 at 07:07 PM Ah, that image of being in someone's arms feeling them softly as the snow falling... precious present. Lovely, Chris. |
| Posted by Cristy M. on 12/06/07 at 05:21 PM i find that i'm having a love affair with the word "sojourn" that i'm keeping secret from the world. i'll tell you my favorite line here (and it is QUITE lovely, indeed), "your smile a carefully arranged bouquet of roses." very lovely love poem. |
| Posted by Keith McFarlane on 02/26/08 at 05:15 PM Excellent stuff, Chris -- fave line is "humor tangy as homemade spaghetti sauce" -- to me it brings home the idea of comfort, levity. Sets the stage for the rest, very very nice dude. |
