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Carving up October into Pieces

by Kristina Woodhill

You've slit it
again

you've let the in
out
and when

your slow oozing
bubbles

liquifying
hard held troubles

i'm smothered

lips dripping
from
the dollopings
of

sopping up
rich
bits of you

that
keep
my spoon
here stirring

in this cauldron

10/12/2007

Author's Note: ;)

Posted on 10/12/2007
Copyright © 2021 Kristina Woodhill

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 10/13/07 at 03:41 AM

I like the language in this, obviously. Especially the "smothered" line.

Posted by Trisha De Gracia on 10/13/07 at 05:55 AM

You could keep an english teacher talking all day about assonance and alliteration! I love the language here too, and the rhythm really accentuates it. Good plan, centering the poem like you did. It makes it feel much stronger than if you had kept it all left.

Posted by Matthew Sharp on 10/15/07 at 04:35 AM

i like the proportion that your words find rich detail seeing past the monotonous mundane. beautiful

Posted by Glenn Currier on 10/15/07 at 05:14 AM

You give October a whole new meaning... I can't wait for the next two weeks the the liquid delights I will find there... trailing your poem behind me on a newly braided autumn thread. Lovely poem, Kristina.

Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 10/18/07 at 04:26 AM

Bittersweet October. The mellow, messy, leaf-kicking, perfect pause between the opposing miseries of summer and winter. As always you do your subject much justice! Thanks.

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 02/19/12 at 03:01 PM

Good one Kristina. Brought a smile to my face, and great for the season of witches. Sorry I missed it back in October 2007.

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