| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 09/09/07 at 02:30 PM Wow Chris. Just complete wow.
Together we’re the only thing
That seems to make sense
I'm with Reggie on this: "One of your most thought-provoking and incisive works, sir." |
| Posted by Glenn Currier on 09/10/07 at 08:32 PM The last two lines really to bring out the emotion for me, the sadness about the crazy pace and the screen sucking all around, sucking our uniqueness, our spirit, our depth. Very evocative and poignant poem, Chris. |
| Posted by Don Matley on 09/11/07 at 02:44 PM Loved the "emotional vampires" image and the concept of independent independence. Great ending with the simple and rural escape from sirens and cells. |
| Posted by Sandy M. Humphrey on 09/11/07 at 03:11 PM "And though everybody’s crazy
In their own way
Together we’re the only thing
That seems to make sense"
The more we understand ourselves through introspection the more we understand each other and the world around us...thanks for your insight. Good work. smh
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| Posted by Laurie Blum on 09/11/07 at 09:18 PM Beautifully done. The word choices add so much to the emotion of the piece. |
| Posted by J. P. Davies on 09/11/07 at 09:55 PM Very nice. I liked the processed word association with saccharin at the end. |
| Posted by Michelle Angelini on 09/12/07 at 06:00 PM Who's view of life is the "true reality"? Your words reflect that the view one person sees isn't the same as another. Hanging on to what we belive is true for our lives, tends to give us a slightly prejudiced view and yes, coat in some ways to make the ugly more palatable.
~Chelle~ |
| Posted by Katerina T Nix on 09/13/07 at 04:23 AM Another excellent piece of work, Chris! I am very selective of the reality I choose to accept... some might call that denial... I just call it 'being fussy' :) Thank you for making my brain tick a little more intelligently! Kat oxo |
| Posted by Alisa Js on 09/13/07 at 05:45 AM Interesting perspective and something worth thinking about. Thanks for sharing.. aloha |
| Posted by Tony Whitaker on 09/13/07 at 02:57 PM "As the sirens and cell phones
That saccharin coat our new world"
Killer lines that depict what we are as the "intelligent" creatures of this dying world...
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| Posted by A. Paige White on 09/14/07 at 10:44 AM "sirens and cell phones that saccharin" rings and blares in my soul. I hate the sounds of both. "Together we’re the only thing
That seems to make sense" and we must make sense of the madness. We must put the pieces of the jigsaw together even if it fails to make an image that could function in the world we inhabit. Great piece! |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 09/16/07 at 08:57 PM Indeed thought provoking, "emotional vampires" creates a whole world of thought in itself as has been suggested. It says to me that regardless of how independent we'd like to think we are we are indeed very dependent on each other as persons, communities, nations, the whole world! |
| Posted by Kyle Anne Kish on 09/19/07 at 03:03 AM I love the description, "emotional vampires." This poem is very decisive and thought provoking, Chris, and yet "together we're the only thing that seems to make sense." ... so true. Thank you for this poem. |
| Posted by Jennifer L Banks on 10/08/07 at 11:56 PM Lovely!
Really brings out a poignant part of life these days. Excellent piece. |
