| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Jim Moore on 08/11/07 at 04:29 PM It's lonely at the top, especially for a person whose only bent on taking advantage of others he/she meets along the path of life. Enjoyed. |
| Posted by Mara Meade on 08/11/07 at 10:16 PM "...you count on
their silence at your feet."
Indeed, how that silence should be in adoration and awe. I'm glad to see you wipe this mis-directed ego from the face of the earth and wish that (how many of us as) "we" could see what we do to others when we refuse to consider the consequences of our own actions.
Well said.
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| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 08/11/07 at 10:22 PM You know I would love the idea of lips growing weeds "from your darkness
and the taste of your deeds". That is a visual that will remain with me forever, and I will look for them as I garden. Your words drift effortlessly one to the next in this lovely rhyming description of this sad self-centered king of cruel. fav+
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| Posted by Aaron Michael on 08/12/07 at 06:18 AM the final stanza was great. wonderful write, Jill. |
| Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 08/12/07 at 06:51 AM I've lived in this poem (I mean it's topic) and I know the brilliant bravery and vision that it takes to see and state in such clear, strong images--the truth of what you realize and act upon. Psychologically liberating and empowering as poetry can be. |
| Posted by Ken Harnisch on 08/12/07 at 07:49 AM This entire poem is quotable...but "your lips have grown weeds from your darkness" stopped me first, in pure amazement. The rest merely wowed me |
| Posted by David R Spellman on 08/12/07 at 12:20 PM Great imagery and phrasing in this gem. A very potent bit of writing. Well done! |
| Posted by Mara Meade on 08/12/07 at 09:44 PM Back for another read - very powerful, from the organic root to the mirrored throne. |
| Posted by Alisa Js on 08/13/07 at 01:11 AM ..and in the end, the vain too, will come to realize.. that beauty is only skin deep... without true character, one cannot experience the absolutel joy of true love.. aloha from this side of paradise.. ;-) |
| Posted by Kyle Anne Kish on 08/13/07 at 03:47 PM "You're a kingdom with a mirror for a throne
you must have known that one day you'd only bow alone" ... these lines haunt me because I know there are others out there living on the same high and getting away with it. So sad and horribly wrong. Thanks for posting this, Jill.
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| Posted by Jim Benz on 08/13/07 at 04:33 PM I actually came to your library looking for another poem I saw posted the other day (that seems to have disappeared) but what I found was this, which could have been read many ways. So I was glad you left an explanation. But even so, the poem touches on so much in human life, deceit, and tragedy. And does it well. Like Ken says above, "your lips have grown weeds" is a very powerful line. |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 08/13/07 at 06:43 PM Indeed a tragic account for all concerned. In simple, direct, yet dramatic style you relate the story and character analysis. Makes one shudder to think about it! |
| Posted by Jean Mollett on 08/14/07 at 04:32 AM Hi Elizabeth,
It's very powerful message. It is sad. Written very well. Whoever this is directed to, sure will get an ear full or more. |
| Posted by Mary Ellen Smith on 08/15/07 at 04:08 AM Very powerful and well written! |
| Posted by Dan Kasten on 08/16/07 at 01:03 AM I think I have written a variation on this theme 100 times during the past few months, never so eloquent, however. The direction is powerful and the message cannot be missed by man or mirror. |
| Posted by Maria Kintner on 08/18/07 at 06:30 AM You are a Master. Your poetry is humbling and enticing. |
| Posted by Mara Meade on 08/20/07 at 09:40 PM Yes, another comment. I probably should just print this one out... |
| Posted by Joan Serratelli on 03/05/09 at 08:34 PM Very powerful write. too many quotable lines. I would not like to be the one you wrote about! Excellent, as usual! |
| Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 08/08/09 at 01:16 PM you're a kingdom with a mirror for a throne. a splendid line indeed, encased in a splendid ode, which prescribe
my sentiments exactly. to a tee, Elizabeth, you've penned the way I feel in several nutshells. |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 04/21/16 at 02:49 PM Congrats on POTD! |
