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An onion on the floor

by Kristina Woodhill

an old house
under renovation
old friends
an invitation
a night of
getting to know you

and an onion on the floor

comfy chairs
a sitting room
a wooden table
the dining room
all praying out loud
making sure God heard

and an onion on the floor

we slept in bags
in the cool night air
we slept in bags
at the head of the stairs
'twas a surreal place
where there were no cares

and an onion on the floor

the kitchen
open, big
and wide
the hearts
of our friends
that same
big size

and an onion on the floor

toe nudged
toe nudged
in the morning
that night

that onion on the floor

we left
with smiles
and I have to say
it’s a pretty
fine home
where an onion
can stay
a rollin’ around
all night and all day

an onion on the floor


Author's Note: Many years have passed since we stayed with friends one night. The house was big and old, pretty neat. We helped fix dinner in the big kitchen and I noticed a nice round onion under the edge of the cupboard on the floor. Sometimes its just kind of interesting to resist that urge to meddle in the flow of a household and I just left it there wondering if someone would pick it up or not. It was there on the floor for our whole visit kind of moving here and there along the under edge of the cupboard as toes would casually touch it now and then. This was not a messy kitchen with food everywhere that was the only item out of place. I had never sat down to dinner with a family who, when they prayed, all prayed at the same time, out loud. It was surreal. We all slept in sleeping bags here and there in the house, some of us nestled in at the top of the stairs landing. It was a place out of the ordinary and Im glad for the memory.

Posted on 09/15/2006
Copyright © 2023 Kristina Woodhill

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 09/15/06 at 04:30 PM

LOL! Real life...family, friends, food. Can't beat it!!

Posted by Angela Nuzzo on 09/16/06 at 04:37 AM

Kristina, this is great. I love the details that bring us into the house. I can just see those bare toes nudging that onion. I have relatives that this poem reminds me of - everything has a place & there's a place for everything. Well done!

Posted by Charles E Minshall on 09/17/06 at 04:51 AM

Sounds like a fun timr Kris. Nicely done...Charlie

Posted by Joan Serratelli on 09/19/06 at 12:17 PM

Wonderful story, filled with loving memories. I could see it all unfold. It's funny how something as silly as an onion on the floor made for such a pleasant night of friendship. Excellent write- very enjoyable story.

Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 09/19/06 at 01:50 PM

A wonderfu depiction of a warm and welcoming home! The repititon of "an onion on the floor" was an effective symbol of the comfort level of the visit! Great writing.

Posted by David Hill on 09/22/06 at 11:25 AM

Clever and excellent, as always. You always use fine detail to take the reader there.

Posted by Maria Terezia Ferencz on 09/22/06 at 10:33 PM

so comfortably poetic, reality warm, I loved this.

Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 12/11/06 at 02:09 PM

thank the lord for onions, purlple, yellow, green, the entire spectrum of their species. and thank the lord as well, whilst we peel, for making us doing other than weeping, but alloting as well their stay, to take their rightful place.,with all the other minions of guests and at the very heart of this tale, it registred in me a gladness.

Posted by Cristy M. on 01/06/07 at 05:51 PM

i feel like i should've read this a couple of months ago when i moved into my house. plenty of onions on the floor here that danced their lonesomes away with the dust bunnies.

Posted by Genevieve Sturrock on 02/04/07 at 03:14 AM

So glad this came up on Member's Favorites list...what a fun read and such a vivid picture captured in light-hearted tones.

Posted by Susan Q Tomas on 08/13/07 at 05:30 PM

God I want this. This is wonderful!

Posted by Don Matley on 09/08/07 at 04:04 PM

it is nice to see an onion can make us laugh as well as cry. Very entertaining. Thanks.

Posted by Michael Faraday on 09/19/08 at 02:42 AM

Great visuals here. cheers, m

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