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by Maria Terezia Ferencz

Let's lick off
all lust of we
till we can taste no more
until all that's left of you
of me
are mere shells
of what we were
breathe me into all of you
those places I adore
breathing out what's left of me
with you
so I can soar


Author's Note: The soul lives on a breath....

Posted on 08/31/2006
Copyright © 2022 Maria Terezia Ferencz

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 08/31/06 at 01:40 AM

Lovely rhyme - this feels like a pure place to be, soul to soul...

Posted by Joan Serratelli on 08/31/06 at 03:18 PM

I agee with the comments above- lovely piece. Excellently articulated!

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 09/01/06 at 02:53 PM

Nicely captures how a couple compliments one another, both physically and metally. Thanks also for your comment on my Dentistry poem. :o)

Posted by Leslie Ann Eisenberg on 09/02/06 at 06:48 PM

yes, YES, this is exactly how it feels...i SO love the opening --Let's lick off all lust of we...yes, strip it down to the core...i get it and i love it!! POTD, please!!! PK

Posted by Glenn Currier on 09/04/06 at 02:08 AM

Wow! The depth and dimension of this poem makes it far bigger than a dozen lines. I sense two bodies tangled, two hearts beating in syncopation and appreciation, two soul photosynthesizing one another creating oxygen the rest of us can breathe. Excellent excellent!

Posted by Charlie Morgan on 09/05/06 at 03:03 PM

...maria, you make me wanna smoke when you write these feelings, mucho goodo, beatimous...melady, peace, chaz

Posted by Mara Meade on 09/05/06 at 08:13 PM

I like the way you bring two senses into this... and make it sensual. Mmmmmm, yes.

Posted by Delilah Coyne on 09/07/06 at 02:39 PM

A very fluid piece. Nicely done and very sensual.

Posted by Anya Kaats on 02/23/12 at 02:07 PM

yes, i agree, very fluid. i very beautiful read.

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