| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 04/08/06 at 07:17 PM ...this is a lovely thing, Jill. A gentle reassuring hand, indeed. Thanks for posting this. |
| Posted by Christel Crews on 04/08/06 at 07:51 PM "Thirsty?—lost? —feeling small? I promise you've not been overlooked." ~ i needed to read this today.. thank you!
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| Posted by Jim Benz on 04/08/06 at 08:06 PM and bless you too. everything is such a vital aspect of the moment, but you've expressed it so well. you're a true poet, jill. |
| Posted by Rula Shin on 04/09/06 at 02:28 PM This is beautiful, layered so subtley with a message of depth. You've taken the idea of subjective knowledge and related it to the self image, questioned. Senses tell you a false story, and reason shapes the puzzle pieces in order to fit them together. I hear you askig - "What is small?" "Who and where am I?" - "What is left by which to know?" - and I hear your most beautiful and profound answer fully AWARE: "We belong to ths same moment before us". The answer is where you stand, it has been all along. Your poetry is inquisitive and so meaningful. |
| Posted by Ashok Sharda on 04/09/06 at 02:28 PM We belong in this same moment before us.
Come take a closer look".. the message lies here and suble. The time cannot be experienced in piece meal nor can it be experienced fractured in space and time.I can sense a questioning mind approaching what is.The moment shall turn into life when life shall merge with it. All the answers lies in this merging.
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| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 04/09/06 at 03:26 PM Amazing reflection, my friend! You make this foreigner feel more at home. |
| Posted by Charles E Minshall on 04/10/06 at 02:58 AM Well done! The button is a nice touch...Charlie |
| Posted by Julie Adams on 04/10/06 at 06:19 PM I love what you have done in this poem...the imagery, the poignant metaphor, the embedded image is stunning...and I join your fans in congratulating you on your accomplishment here...all the best, *jewels* |
| Posted by Soulo Jacob Bourgeau on 04/11/06 at 07:04 AM "Thirsty?—lost? —feeling small?
I promise you've not been overlooked." -- This line is one of many reasons this goes to my faves. What a fantastic piece, Jill. It really moved me. |
| Posted by Mara Meade on 04/12/06 at 01:39 PM Jill, this is gentle but solid in your pure expression of Love...and Hope... and empathy and encouragement. Simply exquisite. |
| Posted by JD Clay on 04/13/06 at 02:35 AM This is an evocative little piece that certainly puts the mind in motion.
\pe4ce...
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| Posted by Kyle Anne Kish on 04/13/06 at 04:11 AM Jill, the sentiments, strength, love, imagery, empathy and yes-we've-been-through-this-together feelings which went into this poem are astounding. Knowing what you've been through to lead up to this poem and where things have gone, gives this piece just the right ray of sunshine on the stem of dew. Yes, you are a true poet. |
| Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 04/17/06 at 06:56 AM Tiny droplet poems...magnify...
look through them,
enlarging vision--
life-lines.
Here evidence
in clear lense of moments of
parallel pathswhere we are
"larger than life"
in a tiny space... |
| Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 04/17/06 at 06:56 AM Tiny droplet poems...magnify...
look through them,
enlarging vision--
life-lines.
Here evidence
in clear lense of moments of
parallel pathswhere we are
"larger than life"
in a tiny space... |
| Posted by A. Paige White on 10/04/06 at 05:47 PM Absolutely beautiful! Love that picture to illustrate... |
| Posted by Laura Doom on 10/06/06 at 11:21 AM This is like splitting the atom by implosion. Incredibly credible - eyes wide and open. |
| Posted by Deborah S Regan on 12/14/06 at 06:12 PM moving words that can touch someone's life |
| Posted by Alisa Js on 03/14/07 at 11:56 PM absolutely beautiful.. aloha |
| Posted by Christina Bruno on 04/11/07 at 01:59 AM i liek the picture with it...reminds me of a "certain slant of light.." but this one is positive lol |
| Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 06/03/07 at 09:30 AM there's never been a time when my life felt not foreign to me, but thank god for that, I don't think I could handle my life as a domestic. It is a beautiful notion you have set down in words, Elizabeth. |
| Posted by Jean Mollett on 06/08/07 at 04:05 AM Hi Elizabeth,
It's beautiful. Great write. I have to agree with the others too. :) |
| Posted by Tony Whitaker on 11/30/07 at 09:58 AM That last stanza reached out and tugged my heart strings so hard I teared up! Just ask my wife, it takes a lot to get me there!
Drizzle, drazzle, dradle, drone
Time for this one to come home - into my favorites! |
| Posted by Joan Serratelli on 02/17/09 at 04:24 PM The first stanza really got to me.It made me feel like you truly understand. I am touced by this beautiful piece. Your talent seems to have no boundries. |
| Posted by George Hoerner on 04/20/09 at 04:00 PM WOW lady, I obviously missed this one. It is simple and beautiful. I love it. You do really nice things!! And happy April to you too! |
