|Member Comments on this Poem|
|Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 02/03/06 at 05:06 PM|
Wonderfully lyrical, Chris. I can hear this song, in more ways than one. Great details, too. High marks!
|Posted by Maureen Glaude on 02/03/06 at 09:56 PM|
can't blame you. We have breakfast every Sat. at our friends' restaurant, and see lots of very beautiful Lebanese people there (as they are who run it). And the little babies, that are in the family are so handsome too.
|Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 02/03/06 at 11:52 PM|
This is very fun to read from the rocketing elevator, the peace movements, to the bomb's roar!!!!
|Posted by Rusty C Arquette on 02/04/06 at 09:05 PM|
Wonderfully lyrical...brought to mind both Neil Young's 'Cinnamon Girl' and Marshal Crenshaw's 'Cynical Girl'...I can see how you were brought 'round to poetry through lyric, as I was in my teens, very nice rhythms Chris! - RCat
|Posted by Maureen Glaude on 02/05/06 at 02:33 PM|
it's also sort of like the current hit "You're Beautiful" about the man who sees a woman on the crowded street but she's with someone, meanwhile he's falling in love with her instantly and doubts he'll ever see her again.
|Posted by JD Clay on 02/06/06 at 05:13 PM|
Fascinating and alluring lyrics, Chris, this one has platinum written all over it. But I'm not sure it would get much air-time on today's emotionally charged radio. Great stuff, especially the word play to cap it off.
|Posted by Charles E Minshall on 02/07/06 at 03:23 PM|
Good poem lyric Chris. But I agree with Jadi not
much air time in todays turmoil filled days...Charlie
|Posted by Bruce W Niedt on 02/07/06 at 03:36 PM|
I agree this would make a great song lyric, maybe with a little metrical tinkering, and I like the "Shy-ite smile" and the "bomb" in the last stanza.... d:-)
|Posted by Ulyss Rubey on 02/08/06 at 12:58 AM|
Very well done indeed, but maybe too hot for the air right now.
|Posted by Gregory R Schelske on 05/08/11 at 09:09 AM|
You are one cool cat. I love this piece...and I want a Lebanese girl.