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holy unhaiku
by Elizabeth Jill
(-ku parentheses)
poem wandering - in drifts
holy unhaiku
split infinitive
feathers fly, fast gathering
emphasis is míen
rivers runalong
sunbathing under eons,
empathy's comma
Abbreviate. Then
sin. Fully. Then deny't.
wds r shameless crooks.
Writ in warning: pens
form spiraling mosaic
haiku sinning spree
12/23/2005 Posted on 12/24/2005
Copyright © 2024 Elizabeth Jill
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Mara Meade on 12/24/05 at 06:43 PM This is like taking tiny bites of thoughts, wisdom... one concept at a time. Holy Unhaiku... it makes for a Holy Feast. |
| Posted by Michelle Angelini on 12/25/05 at 04:07 AM Jill, this is incredible! So totally different from what I've ever seen in my years of reading poetry. Echoing what Jon and Mara already said.
~Chelle~ |
| Posted by Jim Benz on 12/26/05 at 04:21 AM incredible. |
| Posted by Christel Crews on 04/09/06 at 07:25 PM nothing else to say but "wow" |
| Posted by Charles E Minshall on 09/09/06 at 04:22 AM Congratulations for poems of the day Jill....Charlie |
| Posted by Kyle Anne Kish on 09/09/06 at 04:51 AM "Abbreviate. Then
sin. Fully. Then deny't.
wds r shameless crooks." Yes, shameless ... absolutely shameless. You always see the bigger picture, my friend. You always do. I love ya for that. |
| Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 09/09/06 at 04:56 AM ...congrats on your potd. Fascinating is only the beginning here! |
| Posted by Leslie Ann Eisenberg on 09/10/06 at 02:56 PM i don't even know where to start. this is so unique, so fresh and upside down. dang, girl, just a great write, and way fun to read over and over!! congrats on POTD. PK |
| Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 11/08/06 at 09:03 AM I am so happy to have stumbled into this unholy shrine. Absolutely delightful, inventive, zesty, you amaze me every time. |
| Posted by Stephan Anstey on 01/15/09 at 02:36 AM I've heard of that publication, i hear it isn't bad :) |
| Posted by Soulo Jacob Bourgeau on 07/17/09 at 12:21 PM I am in awe. How did I miss this? |
| Posted by Glenn Currier on 09/07/09 at 04:18 PM You swirl the form into a delight for the eyes and ears and the haikulover in me. Clever spacing and un-ing. |
| Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 10/20/09 at 12:48 PM you quilly, jilly, has me spiraling on my cone like vanilla swirl. your odes have taken hold, on them I am completely sold and
one taste of such is to negate all the sour tastes and notes I've ever noticed taking hold in my cochlea and palate. |
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