| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Eli Skipp on 11/19/05 at 02:17 PM I enjoyed this very much; I love the metaphor. |
| Posted by Mara Meade on 11/19/05 at 10:15 PM Navigation can be a tricky thing... you captured it well, including the feelings of sadness that accompany misunderstandings.
Welcome to Pathetic. |
| Posted by Kyle Anne Kish on 11/22/05 at 06:15 PM Jill, I love your comparison of navigating the gondola through the waters of your life. Great poem and welcome, once more, to pathetic. |
| Posted by Charles E Minshall on 11/25/05 at 02:47 AM Just don't swamp the gondola Liz. Good poem.
Welcome to Pathetic. ( I look forward to more of your poems.}.....Charlie |
| Posted by Max Bouillet on 12/14/05 at 09:39 PM If you fall in the water, simply have a religious experience --call it baptism and go on with your life. That way, you can get back in the Gondola with a clean conscious. That makes tilting the Gondola a no lose situation! :) |
| Posted by W. Mahlon Purdin on 01/12/06 at 04:40 AM I love the idea of joining the water under the bridge. Your comment made the poem for me. Honest poetry is the hardest to write and easiest to read. Thanks. |
| Posted by Laura Doom on 04/15/07 at 12:20 AM Like gondolas tilting in the night - turbid waters indeed. Agoraphobia and relationships - not an easy balance to maintain... |
| Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 04/23/07 at 10:18 AM there is so much beauty and wisdom abounding in this poem. all the Doges in Venice would be proud to have read it whilst weeping at its verity. |
| Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 04/29/07 at 02:30 PM The greatest skill, delicate sensitivity to changes of balance and the ability to aim float into the new --comes from tramatic experience and powerful disadvantage taken to heart and transformed with grace. You do this, and your poem (poetry) glides with a buoyant lilt, always surprising and original. The stunning yet subtle use of "water under the bridge" and its allusions deepens the poem, mysteriously even tickling the mythology of what creature might live there...along with as the past that haunts. |
| Posted by Alisa Js on 04/30/07 at 04:38 AM What a great metaphor for navigating relationships...thank you for stopping by.. and for your kind comments.. aloha |
| Posted by Michelle Angelini on 06/15/07 at 03:55 AM Jill, in reading your words, I know you've given me something I needed. I've never known the skill of gondoliers (and I'm Italian), so thank you for helping me learn something about my "country."
~Chelle~ |
| Posted by Aaron Michael on 08/07/07 at 10:51 PM this is a work of art. brilliant. the metaphor is tangible. the feeling behind it is evident, even without the author's notes. well done. |
| Posted by Charlie Morgan on 11/12/07 at 07:20 PM ...elizaBeth Jill, i was logging off when i saw this and had to sign on to say this...sheeesh what a wonderous metaphor to life's tribulations...and the tilting is what's constantly needed, love it, love you...peace, chaz |
| Posted by Joan Serratelli on 02/13/09 at 06:08 PM Wonderful piece- such vivid imagry. I live by the water and it soothes my soul. |
| Posted by Glenn Currier on 08/16/09 at 03:50 AM The meanings of water, being under the bridge, applied to the complexities and pains of relationship works on so many levels. Acceptance of life as it is, learning from the bad stuff, making the good stuff. The poem is packed with wisdom and goodness. Thanks Elizabeth. |
| Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 08/16/09 at 06:26 PM All good writing is like swimming under water and holding your breath. But, eventually, everything merges into one, and runs under the those remaining unburnt bridges. The river like our lives has runs over rocks from the basement of time immemorial. On some of the rocks speak of timeless raindrops and under the rocks are some of our words, and some of the their words. I am haunted by waters.So happy to have this of yours pop up! Thanks.
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| Posted by Sandy M. Humphrey on 08/18/09 at 12:33 AM appropriate to the relationship I am guiding through now with a person I cherish so but am not sure I can not help but collide with as generations do...so I will tilt and avoid near misses...Thanks jill amazing you are. smh |
| Posted by Ken Harnisch on 08/20/09 at 01:26 PM Some skills we acquire are priceless. I wonder, though, at the sometimes cost of their acquistion. Beautifully rendered, Jill! |
| Posted by Alison McKenzie on 08/22/09 at 10:05 PM An exotic beauty of understanding. And many, many hugs your way my friend, to ease the passing of the gondolas! |
| Posted by Meghan Helmich on 09/20/11 at 06:55 PM I can definitely dig this. |
| Posted by Clara Mae Gregory on 11/10/12 at 07:43 PM and this is stellar of stellar |
