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Am I someone else?

by Ava Blu

I write in the bathroom
I prefer the way my thoughts echo
as the water rises towards my fingers
onto the page my emotions flow

it has been said that the best poets
are the ones who lose themselves
by writing someone else's feelings

I cannot seem to do this

though when I hear my words
bounce off the walls,

it is a voice I do not recognize

so maybe Someone Else is writing

and I am only Their echo.

05/16/2005

Posted on 05/17/2005
Copyright © 2024 Ava Blu

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Jeffrey Parren on 05/17/05 at 04:18 PM

how about writing your feelings through someone else? another character? i like the feel of the poem, the questions that arise, the sound, the pictures...maybe i agree because the bathtub is a creative mecca for me...~JPP

Posted by Paul Marino on 05/19/05 at 09:54 AM

yeah, really nice thought jeanna.

Posted by Felicia Aguilar on 05/19/05 at 03:55 PM

Wow, this is a very nice piece. I am always writing from someone else's perspective even though I tend to write in first person. It's always been challenging for me to see things from a different side, a different view. It's both a gift and a curse, because when reading my poetry, people automatically assume, that I am the one speaking.

Posted by Kyle Anne Kish on 05/20/05 at 05:06 PM

Jeanna, I find the simplicity of your poem so profoundly true. Where do our words often come from? Who wrote them? Then again, there they are ... on the paper in front of us in our own handwriting. How exquisite. ~~ Kyle Anne

Posted by Alisa Js on 02/07/07 at 08:42 PM

very well stated...aloha to you from this side of paradise..;-)

Posted by Genevieve Sturrock on 07/30/07 at 01:02 PM

oohh! i do this when i write lyrics. i always go to the bathroom to 'hear' my songs. it doesn't sound like me and i can judge the rythym, rhyme, etc. with an unbiased ear. i hadn't thought about doing that with poetry. cool!

Posted by Genevieve Sturrock on 07/30/07 at 01:02 PM

oh! and congrats on POTD!

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 07/30/07 at 02:17 PM

Congrats on POTD! Well done.

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 07/30/07 at 02:22 PM

Or as I sometimes have felt...suspected, channeling words from the "other side." Thought provoking piece Jeanna, and congrats on POTD. :o)

Posted by Shonda Creemer on 07/30/07 at 04:06 PM

Brilliant ~ I love this one Jeanna. Congrats on a much deserved POTD!!! :)

Posted by JD Clay on 07/30/07 at 04:17 PM

After drying the eyes of this lonesome piece, I surmise, that the Someone Else in your poem is the undiscovered you languishing in the back of your buoyant mind! Congratulations on becoming The Mysterious Poet Of The Day.

Posted by Lauren Singer on 07/31/07 at 03:55 AM

i do the narratives for lots of my poetry on the john as well. its a great place for getting it down, or at least starting it. great humanist write. congrats!

Posted by Michelle Angelini on 07/31/07 at 05:06 AM

Congratulations on POTD Jeanna. Many of my ideas for my poems come when I'm in the kitchen. Your succinct description of how your words are formed is delightful. I'll have to see if some of your words are bouncing off my walls the next time I go in my bathroom.
~Chelle~

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