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by Graeme Fielden



times i


whether you

look inside, and

see a tree that can

afford to throw off

its leaves thinking

they’ll come













Posted on 02/01/2005
Copyright © 2023 Graeme Fielden

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Mark Maxey on 02/01/05 at 01:55 PM

great use of words to create an image...KUDOS...loved the words...flowed well

Posted by Max Bouillet on 02/01/05 at 01:59 PM

Insightful with tremendous detail to form. The changing of the leaves... self-sacrifice and the haunting echo that maybe the leaves won't come back. Beautiful with a dark resonance.

Posted by Michelle Floyd on 02/01/05 at 02:15 PM

How $#%@ing original is THIS? Excellent job. I love it.

Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 02/01/05 at 02:18 PM

i almost asked you the other day "when are you going to supply your readers with more moments?"... these are incredible... this one, no different... i can see and feel the literal and the unsaid... brilliant work... blessings...

Posted by Alison McKenzie on 02/01/05 at 07:20 PM

I love it!

Posted by Charles E Minshall on 02/02/05 at 12:28 AM

Fun Graeme. Like the tree shape...Charlie

Posted by Michelle Angelini on 02/02/05 at 07:40 AM

Thoughtful, insightful, colorful, creative...need any more words to let you know I love this? Great work Graeme.

Posted by Kate Demeree on 02/02/05 at 08:46 AM

Beautifly worded, and presented! Sometimes... I think we all wonder this, yet you found the words.

Posted by JD Clay on 02/03/05 at 05:22 AM

Human emotions are probably the reason why they invented the rake, eh! Come to think about it that's the first lesson we learned in relationship building at summer camp. Until you get caught with pine pitch on your pants, hehe! Good stuff, Graeme. Pe4ce...

Posted by Ann Krischus on 02/03/05 at 03:14 PM

i love this! all of it comes together and works so well.

Posted by Lori I Wolfe on 02/04/05 at 04:30 PM

Great poem .. To me it looks like a leaf ... I love it ... it fits perfectly!

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 02/04/05 at 06:53 PM

Nice work Graeme, both visually and thought provoking wise. Congrats on reaching No. 1!

Posted by Maryellen Lebeda-Parra on 02/05/05 at 09:20 AM

i do not have so much to say at the moment ... but i truly love this

Posted by Jolie Jordan on 02/08/05 at 06:26 AM

SO great.

Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 02/08/05 at 12:18 PM

Cleverly crafted and worded. More than a moment's enjoyment!

Posted by Kyle Anne Kish on 04/28/05 at 07:04 AM

Graeme, I just came upon these and plan to gobble every one of them up in time. Magnificent! ~~ Kyle Anne

Posted by Joan Serratelli on 03/21/09 at 02:24 PM

This is sooooo creative; the shape and colors enhance the words. I LOVE it! Great job!

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 07/09/16 at 02:26 PM

Very cool concrete poem! Smart, colorful, effective. Congrats on POTD!

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