by Leslie Ann Eisenberg

Beneath the audience of watchful eyes
I escape from the circus of this life,
scattering from rung to rung
until I am a stranger, even to myself

Burly braids that once held me
are worn threadbare and I
succumb, the pressure to
scurry splintering my focus

More like a hibiscus flower that
unlearned her bloom,
I’ve grown too thirsty to taste
the potion of devoted lovers

My petalstrung tongue
swallows the secrets
of brother and sister,
until I am too full for thought


Posted on 11/23/2004
Copyright © 2021 Leslie Ann Eisenberg

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 11/23/04 at 06:06 PM

Evocative read Leslie. The first and third stanzas work especially well for me.

Posted by Karl Waldbauer on 11/23/04 at 11:24 PM

"Petalstrung tongue" is art, is creation itself. This phrase and the image of an hibiscus flower remind me of a Georgia O'Keefe painting...beautiful and sensual, yet dangerous.

Posted by Sarah Graves on 11/24/04 at 01:47 AM

Very introspective, and your word usage works well with conveying that. Great read Leslie.

Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 11/28/04 at 12:48 PM

to be so full is something much desired and thoughts come to haunt, like that wolf of yore though they knock and knock, were not prepared for these, the staunch, inpenetrable barriers of a poet's fortitude. a poem much provoking in thought, you have writ here Leslie.

Posted by Paul Marino on 12/01/04 at 07:34 AM

oh my god, that was beautiful. "from rung to rung, until i am a stranger, even to myself". so many great lines in this.

Posted by Scott Cadence on 12/04/04 at 07:19 PM

"Iíve grown too thirsty to taste the potion of devoted lovers" - wonderful. :)

Posted by Ann Krischus on 10/05/06 at 01:43 PM

some of these words and images are absolutely amazing...petalstrung for example and the line "unlearning her bloom". bravo!

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 05/30/08 at 11:54 AM

A fine POTD. I enjoy the circus metaphor, the generous natural alliterations, and especially the phrase - the "petalstrung tongue". Thank you!

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