by Leslie Ann Eisenberg
Beneath the audience of watchful eyes
I escape from the circus of this life,
scattering from rung to rung
until I am a stranger, even to myself
Burly braids that once held me
are worn threadbare and I
succumb, the pressure to
scurry splintering my focus
More like a hibiscus flower that
unlearned her bloom,
I¬íve grown too thirsty to taste
the potion of devoted lovers
My petalstrung tongue
swallows the secrets
of brother and sister,
until I am too full for thought
Posted on 11/23/2004
Copyright © 2020 Leslie Ann Eisenberg
|Member Comments on this Poem|
|Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 11/23/04 at 06:06 PM|
Evocative read Leslie. The first and third stanzas work especially well for me.
|Posted by Karl Waldbauer on 11/23/04 at 11:24 PM|
"Petalstrung tongue" is art, is creation itself. This phrase and the image of an hibiscus flower remind me of a Georgia O'Keefe painting...beautiful and sensual, yet dangerous.
|Posted by Sarah Graves on 11/24/04 at 01:47 AM|
Very introspective, and your word usage works well with conveying that. Great read Leslie.
|Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 11/28/04 at 12:48 PM|
to be so full is something much desired and thoughts come to haunt, like that wolf of yore though they knock and knock, were not prepared for these, the staunch, inpenetrable barriers of a poet's fortitude. a poem much provoking in thought, you have writ here Leslie.
|Posted by Paul Marino on 12/01/04 at 07:34 AM|
oh my god, that was beautiful. "from rung to rung, until i am a stranger, even to myself". so many great lines in this.
|Posted by Scott Cadence on 12/04/04 at 07:19 PM|
"Iíve grown too thirsty to taste
the potion of devoted lovers" - wonderful. :)
|Posted by Ann Krischus on 10/05/06 at 01:43 PM|
some of these words and images are absolutely amazing...petalstrung for example and the line "unlearning her bloom".
|Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 05/30/08 at 11:54 AM|
A fine POTD. I enjoy the circus metaphor, the generous natural alliterations, and especially the phrase - the "petalstrung tongue". Thank you!