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you take you with you
by Michele Schottelkorbyou try, you fail
you try, you fail
white lies lace fairy-tale endings
(itll only hurt a lifetime)
weekday admonitions of devotion
cease with weekend reality checks
swollen eyes accompany sharp tongues
(I really do love you, but) {sometimes love is not enough}
an excuse for an addiction for an angry truth...
we are who we are
and thats all that we are
you can change the scenery
but you take you with you.
Try again.
07/19/2004 Posted on 07/20/2004
Copyright © 2024 Michele Schottelkorb
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Lori Johnson on 07/20/04 at 05:24 PM I feel this deeply....painfully. *ugh* You bring it right to the surface & to the point. I like. :) |
| Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 07/21/04 at 02:35 PM love is never enough and you have touched upon the ultimate trueism, and in a style all your very own and that is what makes you you. |
| Posted by Alison McKenzie on 07/21/04 at 03:54 PM How many times around the "you try, you fail" circle do we go? How long before the me I take with me doesn't fail? And finally, I'm afraid it's true, sometimes love isn't enough. What is? How do some couples make it? Such stark honesty, Michele. Blessings to you dearheart. |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 07/21/04 at 04:48 PM The condenscending tough love tone works well here. Clever also the simplicity yet profoundness of the title. |
| Posted by Thomas K. Hunt on 07/21/04 at 10:01 PM So much truth in this read that I can realy relate to...Excellent |
| Posted by Ashok Sharda on 07/22/04 at 12:59 AM 'sometimes love is not enough', well, I thought love was never enough in the absence of a greater understanding of the self and the other, leading from inside to the inside and not just on the surface. Understanding that, you are you and I love you as YOU and I am I and you love me for what I am but having accepted this , having accepted the acceptance, we shall struggle alone and in togetherness to grow.In the absence of this understanding 'you can change the scenery
but you take you with you.' You, and your essence, your basic nature, now exposed despite the change in the scenery. Kill the hopes and I think thats the only safe way to refined survival.
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| Posted by Howard F Farewell on 07/22/04 at 07:22 AM i really do dig this |
| Posted by Sarah Graves on 07/22/04 at 09:12 PM Wow, this is a very thought provoking peice Michelle. I took in more than maybe you intended. Thank you. |
| Posted by Traci Mabats on 07/23/04 at 06:40 PM holy @#$% lady you are a bullet. |
| Posted by Maureen Glaude on 07/24/04 at 09:42 AM amazing and frank, and it's so true that sometimes love isn't enough. Very well done and original in style. |
| Posted by Richard Trotter on 07/25/04 at 12:12 AM a great poem, the message of encouragement and brutal honesty comes through very strongly. Great work :) |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 08/04/04 at 03:01 AM A philosophical and keen observation on the human condition! |
| Posted by Max Bouillet on 08/16/04 at 02:15 PM Intuitive wisdom that makes one realize so much. I have changed my scenery many times... and yet it is still me whenever I look in the mirror. Exceptional writing! :) |
| Posted by Mahassine Mir on 10/29/04 at 12:46 PM Excellent observation on our limits. |
| Posted by Maureen Glaude on 10/29/04 at 12:55 PM amazing, so great to find. |
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