| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Agnes Eva on 03/12/04 at 07:33 PM Well this resonates with me because I dream of being in my 'writing place' right when those sequences happen deep in my thoughts... it is hard to retrace the steps & regather the pieces if you have to come back to it |
| Posted by Maureen Glaude on 03/12/04 at 09:27 PM how amazing, a non-poem that scores well as a poem. Ingenious. |
| Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 03/12/04 at 10:53 PM maybe you are the poem... oh yes, and there is no spoon :)... blessings... |
| Posted by Alex Smyth on 03/12/04 at 11:55 PM So many times I get that fleeting conciousness, that feeling of "I almost know what that was I just thought", but then it is gone. This seems a bit whimsical, very nicely expressed! |
| Posted by Mara Meade on 03/13/04 at 02:55 AM To hold on to one's self when chaos is everywhere is most dfficult indeed, even for the most pure and simplest of intentions. Oh, I understand this fleeting glimpse into that could be, what is intended... |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 03/15/04 at 02:24 PM Very good Ashok. A new favorite of mine of yours! |
| Posted by Graeme Fielden on 03/15/04 at 04:18 PM This leads me to believe that it takes the hand of God to create and that we may lose our individuality as we meld with our creator, during the creative process…an interesting thought indeed! Heheh…you keep us thinking Ashok :) |
| Posted by Traci Mabats on 03/15/04 at 04:40 PM Yeah, Im right there with Chris. My new favorite too. |
| Posted by Ginette T Belle on 03/16/04 at 03:00 AM wonderfully expressed... |
| Posted by Karl Waldbauer on 03/16/04 at 07:52 AM First stanza, last stanza..wonderful. The middle of your piece is sublime. |
| Posted by Rula Shin on 03/17/04 at 01:00 AM As Jeff Goldblum says in Jurassic Park, “life will find a way” hahahah - once Nature organizes ITS scattered selves within to counteract the chaotic vibrations an aware active human being causes. Question: If I write a ‘lousy’ poem based only on 'glimpses' of the meaningful poem, have I created something still, selves scattered? “It was here…and now, its not…it is here…now…and I am not,” both always ‘here’ on different planes - the irony of this existence. The intersection of these planes is the destination, the creation, the completion of life, the ordering of chaos, experiencing the ‘whole sequence’ - and you have given a way to get there, “one will have to assemble one’s selves to assemble…chaos into creation.” Though one can come to pass through this intersection by dumb luck as well. Brilliantly assembled :-)
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| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 03/17/04 at 12:43 PM It is in the Creator's image, I think, that we attempt to make order out of chaos. An Ashok ending to this poem, definitely. Often a bit (sometimes a lot) of selfabnegation in your poetry. At least selfeffacement. Thought-provoking as always as well. |
| Posted by Glenn Currier on 03/17/04 at 02:41 PM Oh, man, can I relate. I began a poem and it got lost when another more urgent one intruded in. I love the way you see your self (coming and going) in your poetbeing. |
| Posted by Melanie A Bennett on 06/05/04 at 12:56 PM Wonderful... really wonderful! |
| Posted by Laura Doom on 08/24/04 at 05:38 PM The will to impose order on chaos :> It's a challenge to undertake an arrangement of these pieces to achieve an appearance which feels 'natural'... |
| Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 03/29/06 at 04:21 AM I just found this GEM! —in the FAVORITES list! :) :) :) Love at first sight! |
| Posted by Maria Terezia Ferencz on 10/28/06 at 03:29 PM Long live chaos....creator of order |
| Posted by Genevieve Sturrock on 04/27/07 at 05:33 PM random member fav today....wonderfully written! glad it popped up, and that i was here to experience it. |
| Posted by George Hoerner on 07/27/17 at 01:02 AM This poem is proof that you were here and I believe you to still be here at least you have been very recently as I have seen other rather recent 'posts' on this site. So much of what we 'believe' is here only because we believe it or show it. Hope all is well! |
