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empty paper cup

by Gavin M Roy

oh starbucks coffee
you were once hot like afternoon passion
but now you're just cold and bitter
like a frigid ex-lover
nagging
until I drink you down
and walk away

12/02/2003

Author's Note: Another Vente Drip Down

Posted on 12/02/2003
Copyright © 2017 Gavin M Roy

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Richard D Frederick on 12/02/03 at 11:20 PM

ah, starbucks! i can identify, i am a slow drinker! very witty! i can say that i'm glad to see some new material from the site founder.

Posted by David R Spellman on 12/02/03 at 11:29 PM

Had to laugh at the analogy of this one! How tempting it can be when fresh and hot, but so darned bitter when the charm is gone. Grounds for divorce in some cases! Well done.

Posted by Cathlyn Cartier on 12/02/03 at 11:30 PM

Great use of analogy...not a coffee drinker myself, but very relatable, even if it's not palatable.

Posted by Maureen Glaude on 12/03/03 at 01:19 AM

some moments so soon lose their appeal. Yet on another cold morning, soon, the lure of the next trip to Starbucks is inevitable, no?

Posted by Dana E Brossard on 12/03/03 at 02:20 PM

**chuckles** Very nice =)

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 12/03/03 at 07:07 PM

Good use of metaphor/analogy, and as a fellow coffee drinker, sure can relate. :o)

Posted by Kristine Briese on 12/03/03 at 07:11 PM

*chuckle* I don't even think we have a Starbucks here, and I don't drink coffee, but still I find myself relating to this. Nice work.

Posted by Leslie Ann Eisenberg on 12/03/03 at 08:52 PM

the economy of words gets the job done! i love the "nagging" bit, as well.

Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 12/04/03 at 02:36 AM

LOL! Sounds like a caffiene addict! You make your point briefly and strongly!

Posted by Susan Q Tomas on 12/06/03 at 04:24 AM

That Starbucks coffee is expensive. I can see why you felt obligated to finish it.

Posted by Lindsay Sanders on 12/09/03 at 12:07 AM

ah i am a starbucks addict myself... this very clever and well written!

Posted by Alison McKenzie on 12/14/03 at 09:28 PM

Yikes, who knew that Starbuck's coffee the encounter of lovers/partners was so similar? Frightening, I never would have thought to compare the two. Definitely thought evoking, short and to the point! Thanks for the different window!

Posted by John Nivel on 07/03/05 at 06:42 PM

Even if I could afford Starbucks coffee, I wouldn't buy it on principle alone. The price of the coffee is acceptable, I believe, if one is writing a sociological thesis, and needs to sit in the cafe to make random observations. But for caffeine, I will take other, less trendy equivalents. The poem is memorable though. And, nice and succinct.

Posted by Deborah S Regan on 06/13/06 at 02:48 PM

Vente? No wonder it got cold.

Posted by Tony Whitaker on 04/07/07 at 08:59 AM

I laughed and wholly agree!!! Nice write Gavin!

Posted by James Zealy on 08/26/09 at 02:08 PM

Short bitter and to the point congrats on POTD

Posted by Richard Vince on 08/26/09 at 07:48 PM

great stuff, man. when i read Mr Zealy's comment above, "short bitter and to the point" just made me think "espresso". :) thank you for raising a smile. :)

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 08/27/09 at 03:20 AM

Great POTD! Thank you.

Posted by Leslie Ann Eisenberg on 09/05/09 at 04:30 AM

this hasn't been potd before? jeez! mazal tov! pk

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