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Breath

by Max Bouillet

wet breath
warm and desperate
smell of musk and wine

the lusty lingering
of wind-kissed whispers
lick my ears

as tripping lips
stumble drunk
down my neck,
my chest

soon i am swallowed
and all that is left
is the echo of
my soul
quivering
in cold flesh.

06/09/2003

Posted on 06/09/2003
Copyright © 2020 Max Bouillet

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Amber B on 06/11/03 at 02:01 AM

Beautiful. *smiles* Took the reader for quite a ride! Thank you also for commenting on my poem. Its nice to hear feedback on artistic attempts. :)

Posted by Alastre Zidler on 06/11/03 at 04:52 PM

Sensual and intoxicating words. Rich images, sharp in their blurriness (if that makes any sense). Very evocative.

Posted by Christopher Shin on 06/11/03 at 05:58 PM

Very descriptive. I enjoyed the emotions implied in the details

Posted by Jessica Yen on 06/12/03 at 04:50 AM

suberb word choice and beautiful imagery.

Posted by Agnes Eva on 06/12/03 at 03:40 PM

fantastic movement of the breath down the body, very sexy and lush

Posted by Graeme Fielden on 06/12/03 at 04:14 PM

ditto for all those comments above...a sensual & moving piece of poetry!

Posted by Quinlan L Gibson on 06/13/03 at 12:49 PM

what a beautiful visual. Sensual and graceful. Nice work.

Posted by Kate Demeree on 06/13/03 at 02:46 PM

UUUUUUuuuuuuuuummmmmmmmmmmm...... for some reason I feel like purring.

Posted by Melissa Arel on 06/13/03 at 06:39 PM

I agree w/everyone's comments.. this is awesome writing.. perfect word use and aura!

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 06/13/03 at 07:43 PM

Evocative to the max Max! :o)

Posted by Kalikala Smith on 06/14/03 at 04:57 AM

stunningly blurred... does that make any sense? love it

Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 09/18/03 at 11:06 AM

what a delightful predicament to find someone in. if should happen to all of us.

Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 01/06/04 at 06:47 AM

breathtaking and sensual... blessings...

Posted by Alison McKenzie on 07/15/04 at 12:42 PM

It sounds lazy and delicious.

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