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A Hungry Bird

by Karl Waldbauer

I thought I saw an emerald clad hummingbird
drinking at my new scarlet feeder,
but I was wrong.
It was you,
piercing my bright red beating heart
and draining my life away.

06/02/2003

Posted on 06/03/2003
Copyright © 2022 Karl Waldbauer

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Agnes Eva on 06/04/03 at 06:13 PM

stinging, crystally formed metaphor!

Posted by Max Bouillet on 06/30/03 at 04:55 PM

Excellent twist... painful imagery. Wonderfully crafted.

Posted by Jean Mollett on 05/07/04 at 05:04 AM

Hi Karl, Good one, sounds like a love went bad. So sad. Lots can relate to this one.

Posted by Leslie Ann Eisenberg on 07/18/04 at 08:43 PM

whoa. searing.

Posted by Richard Trotter on 12/28/04 at 08:04 PM

excellent imagery, best poem I have read on here for a while :)

Posted by Charles E Minshall on 04/19/06 at 05:53 AM

Ouch Karl. Well done...Charlie

Posted by Michael Faraday on 05/09/06 at 02:55 PM

I can see why you received many comments on this poem! Succinctly said and all that jazz! :) m

Posted by Kyle Anne Kish on 05/14/06 at 04:17 PM

Karl, I would never have thought to incorporate a hummingbird at a feeder with your bright red heart and draining your heart away. You have incorporated such a melancholy poem in such few words and your imagery is excellent. Wow!

Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 07/18/07 at 01:26 PM

Quite striking analogy. Others have expressed the full impact of the poem.

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 11/25/08 at 03:54 PM

Wow!

Posted by Traci Mabats on 12/29/09 at 01:10 AM

But it was you sucking the life out of me! Bwaaah! I love the jab. Knock out poem!

Posted by Cole Miller on 04/04/13 at 02:52 PM

woah, that took an unexpected turn! i think the calm energy of the beginning really helped the end hit harder.

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 04/04/13 at 03:36 PM

Congrats on a fine POTD!

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