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Mean Spirited Little Ditty
by Alex Smyth
We had a chance encounter
At our local Wal-Mart store.
In truth it was quite awkward,
With no warning sent before.
From 20 years and 2 grown kids
I ought to know this man.
But he looks like his father now-
Unshaved, unkempt, untan.
The comely smile is dingy and
The polished shoes are dull.
The shirts I proudly tailored
Are now store bought, limp and full.
His chest slid to his belly!
(Which allowed a pointed look)
Guess SHE doesn't know the secret
Of the Adkins way to cook.
The good say justice done
In blessed peace and living well.
In me the thing less noble
Sings with glee, He looks like hell!
05/07/2003 Author's Note: Admittedly, a disinterested observer may not have been so critical. But this is MY spot.
*****For someone who REALLY means business see :I think I should hire someone to break your kneecaps: by Megan Reigner*****
Posted on 05/08/2003
Copyright © 2024 Alex Smyth
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Agnes Eva on 05/09/03 at 05:24 AM hey, that observation mode deserves its spot in poetic limelight too. excellent delivery on the promises of the title. |
| Posted by Mara Meade on 05/09/03 at 12:06 PM -forgive me- heh eh heh eh heh.... |
| Posted by Kara Hayostek on 05/09/03 at 02:42 PM Tooo funny, and mean spirited yes, but its to be expected. Love that line "i guess she doesnt know the atkins way to cook" haha
The rhyme is fun as well and nicely done |
| Posted by Charles E Minshall on 05/10/03 at 05:58 AM He-he-he-he-he......Charlie |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 05/28/03 at 01:58 PM Hmmm...sounds like one of those awkward ex-husband or wife encounters. Well presented, vivid poetic snapshot. You might want to change quiet to quite in the third line of the first stanza. |
| Posted by Lisa-Dawn Sparling on 06/13/03 at 04:16 AM very entertaining. I love it when you read a poem with rythmes and they seem so flowing and unforced (like mine - lol)...great writing |
| Posted by Jean Mollett on 06/17/03 at 05:43 AM Hi Alex,
Good one, yes just a little rough around the edges. Hee! Hee! A know a couple guys like that. Why do they do it? Just don't care, I guess. |
| Posted by Graeme Fielden on 06/17/03 at 12:31 PM you paint an excellent picture of a man well past his prime! very humerous! |
| Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 07/14/03 at 11:25 AM mommy dearest or should I say dearest mom, love this little mean dittied irony of a love poem. |
| Posted by Max Bouillet on 07/14/03 at 03:24 PM Nothing wrong with being mean spirited... especially when it is this entertaining! Great poem. |
| Posted by Quinlan L Gibson on 07/18/03 at 12:24 AM and an evil smile crept across my face...hisssssss |
| Posted by Mo Couts on 06/28/11 at 11:03 PM HILARIOUS...love it =) |
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