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Waiting for Inspiration
by Sarah BrookesSeldom do they tread the loamy earthen banks,
dip quaking toes into smogged streams
only to roam across the darkened landscape,
dancing with their ripened tongues -
sway and shiver in the dank rusted orchards
of brooding wintersÂ’ eves.
Watch you from leaking tree houses (green
and slick from care neglected), weaving
cotton shadows to hang from lolling rooftops,
shaking star bursts from moonstained downy tresses.
Flitting on tattered silk kites, swim within
thistledown strata, sifting through insipid morning glow,
light bleeds internal, splits fernfronded rainbows open in their wake
raking in celestial splendour on the dirt-clod shores
of my secret retreat. Dig fingers into curdled soil
and wait for their return.
03/11/2003 Author's Note: I fear my work is in need of improvement. All the same, may I present my application piece.
Posted on 03/12/2003
Copyright © 2024 Sarah Brookes
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Melissa Arel on 03/12/03 at 05:23 PM Powerful, exquisite words you've chosen to use in this piece! It really sets a cerebral mood :) Great read.. |
| Posted by Meredith C Hartwell on 03/12/03 at 08:19 PM Crystal imagery, and overall a beautiful piece. You use a lot of adjectives, and that might be hindering the flow a tad. Impressive work already. Welcome welcome welcome. |
| Posted by Rusty C Arquette on 03/12/03 at 10:38 PM I love the pure use of imagery - Each word like one of those Reese's Pieces that Elliot left for ET to find his way out of the woods..one attractive sweet treat after another - RCat |
| Posted by Megan Harvey on 03/13/03 at 05:10 AM The use of so many adjectives makes this read more like prose than poetry (not that that's a bad thing!), but it doesn't hinder from bringing the reader in. Your grasp of language is impressive. |
| Posted by Rhodora M Fitzgerald on 03/13/03 at 06:36 PM Author's Note: I fear my work is in need of improvement
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That's what this place is all about Sarah.. we've all got room for improvement. You're off to a great start! Beautiful poem! |
| Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 04/09/03 at 02:45 PM This pouring like Niagara has me in the mist. |
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