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Send Rain. Send Love.
by Elizabeth Jill
Send Rain. Send Love.
Send Sun and Grace.
Forgiveness. Musclework.
Let kindness know your face.
Fold all of the above
into an envelope hereof.
Send everything you have,
send grievances if such is it.
Send hope,
because without it
there would be no prayer.
Send hopelessness,
because without it
there would be no prayer.
01/20/2014 Author's Note: I've been working intensely with Sherra (service dog) this past year. Have missed you. Hope to reintegrate with all of you and your artistic souls this new year.
Namaste
Posted on 01/20/2014
Copyright © 2024 Elizabeth Jill
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Clara Mae Gregory on 01/20/14 at 09:38 PM *stellar blossoms*
[love this,Jill] :) |
| Posted by George Hoerner on 01/21/14 at 01:38 AM Great to see you back lady. And of course done very well as you do all your poems. |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 01/21/14 at 04:22 PM Excellent first step at reintegration Jill. Nice to read you again. |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 01/21/14 at 08:02 PM Mixed messages. But rain, love, and hope surely timely always. Need not pray for hopelessness I think. Circumstances may bring that unbidden! Interesting contrasts. |
| Posted by Laura Doom on 01/21/14 at 10:41 PM Mixed messages indeed Q; I guess it depends if we are talking cause or effect here.
Good to see you found your way home--living on the ej... |
| Posted by Dane Campbell on 01/22/14 at 12:12 AM
The juxtaposition of contrasts--i.e. the request for hope as well as hopelessness--strike a fine balance in a poem that itself deftly explores the concept of equilibrium as a necessary component of human experience. (As $#%@inson said, "To comprehend a nectar/Requires sorest need.") Moreover, the pleasant rhythm and use of mellifluous notes drive the work to its sweet, thoughtful conclusion. In short, a quite triumphant return. |
| Posted by Gail Wolper on 01/22/14 at 01:36 AM I find this piece deeploy moving in its simplicity. Will keep on the lookout for more of your stuff |
| Posted by Amos Last on 01/22/14 at 08:31 AM i like the paradox of hope and hopelessness paired as cause (as if essential) to validate prayer
the note of Sherra speaks of this hope
perhaps you've been away, but for me i find you here from this read on... |
| Posted by Jo Halliday on 01/22/14 at 09:31 AM Where to send, Jill? |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 01/22/14 at 07:27 PM Returned to sender a quiet thank-you for this piece. Such an all inclusive envelope that we might share and find kindness each day. |
| Posted by Johanna May on 02/03/14 at 02:18 PM to some, you, yourself, is rain xxxx |
| Posted by Rob Littler on 05/06/14 at 05:34 AM The end left my mind filling in the discourse, the sound of this piece, in particular, when spoken, is what makes me quiver |
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