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Snow v
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it's a bad season
to be alone,
so here we are.
slate-blue afternoons,
coffee by the gallon,
desperate kisses,
half-lies we tell
to survive the night,
footnotes melting
on our tongues,
asterisks dangling
from the sky.
you are freezing
out there alone
and for right now
you need me.
but this is denver,
babe, and by tomorrow
the streets will dry,
we'll have sunny skies.
i am not a springtime
boyfriend, i know,
but for right now it's winter
and i'll cherish the snow.
12/15/2012
Author's Note: * It's beginning to feel a lot like Christmas.
* Full title: December 15 - Snow v
Posted on 12/15/2012
Copyright © 2024 Jason Wardell
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Julie Adams on 12/16/12 at 01:33 AM I love every inch of this...the snowy scene u created and the poem that follows...the images in ur poem each build a picture, not unlike the one above it. Alone, each image is solitary and finite in some respects, but as you build them upon one another, the layering adds so much dimension and depth...I also love how you open and close the poem, it is perfectly delivered and they too layer the piece and draw the reader in, drawn to our own humanity....beautiful. peace n poems, jewels xo |
| Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 12/16/12 at 02:26 AM Beautiful and clever. Nicely done. |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 12/16/12 at 03:34 AM I like it all, but especially these lines - "footnotes melting
on our tongues,
asterisks dangling
from the sky." |
| Posted by Angie Jenkins on 12/16/12 at 04:01 AM Great write (despite the unfortunate truths)! I'm glad you're staying warm, albeit not permanently, until better things come your way :) |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 12/21/12 at 04:22 AM Excellent work Jason. Both from a visual (as in the first part) and a verbal (as in the second part). |
| Posted by A. Paige White on 12/23/12 at 03:45 AM ~So here we are. Leaving our little snow flakes in return.
making marks on your little slate
indicating thoughts that might flow
together with your thoughts and the snow becomes a drift... and my mood
is lifted by the beauty of your poetry.
Thanks! |
| Posted by Joe Cramer on 12/30/12 at 02:16 AM ... brilliant..... |
| Posted by Matthew Zangen on 10/30/19 at 02:29 AM Beautifully, tragically presented, Jason. There's a cynical appreciation of circumstance here that I can identify with. "footnotes melting on our tongues" is just perfect. I hope things have warmed up for you since then. So glad this was brought my way by PotD. Much deserved. |
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