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by Jody Pratt

I do not count the
syllables in my haiku's;
I simply wing it.



Alternatively...

I do not count the
feathers when I try to fly;
I simply wing it.

02/24/2012

Posted on 02/24/2012
Copyright © 2024 Jody Pratt

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Alison McKenzie on 02/25/12 at 01:53 AM

Very nice! I like them both.

Posted by George Hoerner on 02/25/12 at 02:41 AM

It sounds good to me. I always stop counting after 1, 2, 3,...! It just gets too hard. By the way do you know that there are exactlly the same number of points on 4 inch line as there are on a 10 inch line?

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 02/25/12 at 09:01 PM

This becomes so much more to think about with the two alternatives presented. Thanks, Jody!

Posted by Shannon McEwen on 02/25/12 at 09:55 PM

At first read I liked the first version, then the second grew on me until I couldnt decide, love seeing alternatives!

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 02/26/12 at 10:50 PM

Ha! Touché old man!! You and I are birds of a feather when it come to haiku and flight.

Posted by Mary Frances Spencer on 02/28/12 at 07:16 AM

Like 'em both!!! (-: MFS

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