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Unromantic Oceans

by George Hoerner

the Pacific Ocean yawns
and with a tired frown
swallows the sun
closing another day

night beginning anew
with secret meetings
low conversations
in bars and motel rooms

across this country
souls unable to
establish themselves
during a too hectic day

try to drink away their thoughts
attempting to recuse themselves
from the days activities
looking into a glass of stupor

or they grasp at some
unknown person willing
to become their one night stand
willing to disappear like Custer

much later the night ends
as the Atlantic Ocean
opens its mouth
and spits another day

into existence

12/14/2011

Posted on 12/15/2011
Copyright © 2024 George Hoerner

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Alison McKenzie on 12/15/11 at 05:52 AM

That's quite an image, "as the Atlantic Ocean opens its mouth and spits another day". There is an edge to this piece that is refreshing to see in your work.

Posted by Rhiannon Jones on 12/16/11 at 04:36 PM

Agree w/Alison, and I think I like the imagery of the first stanza even better than the last. It is unsettling.

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 12/16/11 at 07:30 PM

Using the two oceans like this really gives a sense of vastness, the passing of time, all that can happen in a dismal night. It is dark, but not completely grim, and I also like how the oceans seem very unattached - the "tired frown", the Atlantic spitting the day out. A unique piece, George. I like.

Posted by Lori Blair on 12/19/11 at 12:49 AM

Beautiful..and though spitting never sounded so touching as it now does while reading your work..lovely work my friend!

Posted by Ken Harnisch on 12/20/11 at 01:49 PM

wow...an ecclesiastical view of things that jumps off your pen, George..and I am in awe.

Posted by Laurie Blum on 12/20/11 at 08:24 PM

This just grabs my attention and reminds me of those old detective novels. The last stanza really makes this whole poem!

Posted by Jody Pratt on 12/25/11 at 01:59 AM

I love this. The first stanza reminded me of my "Sleeping Setting" poem. Very well written!

Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 02/16/12 at 02:21 PM

there is an Ernie Pyle quality about this piece, somber, yet exquisite in every sense.

Posted by Jody Pratt on 02/16/12 at 09:39 PM

I think others have already really embodied what I wanted to say about this piece. The oceans are amazing imagery, exactly what I seek out in poetry. The piece is sad, but well told, and thus beautiful.

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