Member Comments on this Poem |
Posted by Alison McKenzie on 12/15/11 at 05:52 AM That's quite an image, "as the Atlantic Ocean
opens its mouth and spits another day". There is an edge to this piece that is refreshing to see in your work. |
Posted by Rhiannon Jones on 12/16/11 at 04:36 PM Agree w/Alison, and I think I like the imagery of the first stanza even better than the last. It is unsettling. |
Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 12/16/11 at 07:30 PM Using the two oceans like this really gives a sense of vastness, the passing of time, all that can happen in a dismal night. It is dark, but not completely grim, and I also like how the oceans seem very unattached - the "tired frown", the Atlantic spitting the day out. A unique piece, George. I like. |
Posted by Lori Blair on 12/19/11 at 12:49 AM Beautiful..and though spitting never sounded so touching as it now does while reading your work..lovely work my friend! |
Posted by Ken Harnisch on 12/20/11 at 01:49 PM wow...an ecclesiastical view of things that jumps off your pen, George..and I am in awe. |
Posted by Laurie Blum on 12/20/11 at 08:24 PM This just grabs my attention and reminds me of those old detective novels. The last stanza really makes this whole poem! |
Posted by Jody Pratt on 12/25/11 at 01:59 AM I love this. The first stanza reminded me of my "Sleeping Setting" poem. Very well written! |
Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 02/16/12 at 02:21 PM there is an Ernie Pyle quality about this piece, somber, yet exquisite in every sense. |
Posted by Jody Pratt on 02/16/12 at 09:39 PM I think others have already really embodied what I wanted to say about this piece. The oceans are amazing imagery, exactly what I seek out in poetry. The piece is sad, but well told, and thus beautiful. |