Blowing out the birthday candles

by Shannon McEwen

No diamond rings
Expensive gifts
Or fancy cars

Forget about the
immense dreams
or endless wishes

Fancy bows
With shiny wrapping
Is not required

Just show me
In a real way
that I matter


Posted on 12/02/2011
Copyright © 2021 Shannon McEwen

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 12/02/11 at 03:38 PM

Sounds reasonable. There's an honesty about this that's well-told

Posted by Lori Blair on 12/03/11 at 09:53 PM

Awww...isn't that what we all need? Not material rewards..just acceptance? So well said. Thank you!

Posted by Laura Doom on 12/04/11 at 12:08 PM

A wish? A retrospective? Perusal of the list suggests it could be either, and this poses more questions than it answers -- the signature of good writing.

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 12/05/11 at 09:32 PM

Short, simple...but quite the impact. Excellent closure in that last stanza; what I think...hope we all wish for.

Posted by Adam Dyson on 12/13/11 at 08:06 AM

I love how the style of the write matches the message. Simple, honest and true.

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