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Beyond This Point

by Quinlan L Gibson

The wind boasts cruel and merciless cackling.
as the empty bottle of Cabernet lies in the dewy grass.
Another day of procrastination, or is it just Wednesday?
Time passes more friendly when there's a fog
to distract you from the outside carnival.
Carnivorous and deceitful, nothing short of evil
as your dreams fall into the ravine along the road
laced with empty pop bottles and fast food wrappers.
Shredded will and jagged pills
make voluntary breathing; screening calls of life and chance
waiting for the sympathetic tide to come and rush this all away...

10/31/2011

Posted on 11/02/2011
Copyright © 2023 Quinlan L Gibson

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by W. Mahlon Purdin on 11/03/11 at 03:37 AM

"Another day of procrastination, or is it just Wednesday?" A great line, Quinlan. The feeling of this poem, discerning, lonely, discouraged and yet, immensely hopeful, faithful. It's like a passing breeze that arouses instinct... "what was that?" Much enjoyed. Many thanks. As always. -- Bill

Posted by Ken Harnisch on 11/03/11 at 10:06 AM

"Time passes more friendly when there's a fog to distract you from the outside carnival." Ah, how i sometimes long for the fog to disguise the circus...excellent line, Quinlan. Excellent poem!

Posted by Leslye Writer on 11/03/11 at 11:52 AM

nods checking the tide table...this poem got me caught me.

Posted by Shannon McEwen on 11/03/11 at 01:56 PM

I agree, excellent imagery here

Posted by Joe Cramer on 11/03/11 at 02:03 PM

... nice, very nice.....

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 11/06/11 at 08:04 PM

I agree with all the other comments, and as with others, and though the whole poem is great in its imagery and expression, I especially enjoyed these lines: Another day of procrastination, or is it just Wednesday? Time passes more friendly when there's a fog to distract you from the outside carnival. Good to read you again Quinlan. :)

Posted by Rachelle Howe on 11/26/11 at 06:12 AM

Chris stole my favorite lines. I dig, babe! Had thoughts on punctuation at the end. Open ended intentionality?

Posted by Bethany Lee on 02/11/12 at 01:41 AM

Wonderful, Q! Nice to see you're still sharing here. I've been away for years...

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