Dear Attractive, by Ryan NarceI was sunk,
absolutely sunk and done for
when you yanked the sharpie out of my hand
& drew on my arm in the din of the party,
& though I put serious effort into pretending that my
heart wasn’t doing panic-laps around my brain,
squeezing me out of an already flagging emotional
control,
you could feel my bow buckle from
where you were standing
after all, I don’t have a clue who I was talking with
or what about,
teeth gleefully chattering & feeling
the initial waves of real affection,
of plunging & anxious
vulnerability
& when I looked down at my arm, my own
face still close enough to yours
to feel &
smell
the warm alcohol on your breath,
i saw that
you had written your name there
in a heart with an arrow,
as you would in grade school
goofy & earnest & nakedly obvious
& suddenly I couldn’t look at you
my very toes blushed & I swallowed
audibly, heart & brain following
one another down down down
buckled bow & all
_____________________
so hours later & with pie-eyes swooning,
I flopped down onto my bed dreaming about
adjectival joy &
the next morning I woke up in my clothes
& realized that your tattoo had
rubbed off onto my limp pillow in the night,
branding your name in backwards smudges
all over its face
& of course, in my boyish & artless way,
I wanted your name etched onto my whole room,
or jealously written dozens of times
in a grade-school notebook
in as many daft variations, serif & sans,
proudly gilded and offered up as proof
of something inchoate
& indelible
- such are the fearless
& only half-brave wishes of an idiot
_________________________________
& set in mirrored sharpie where I lay my head, it was your name
in your own drunk script, from an unrepeatable lie of a night,
that tortured me as you glacially rejected my
shy & clumsy advances & poorly conjured pretexts
for a kiss
& even now, as I try to strangle every last bit of you out of my head
& harden in proportion to the depth of my shame &
hapless, bruised inferiority
I still cannot even say that name of yours,
that name whose blurred shape pockmarks my favorite
pillowcase,
whose very sound leaves me sunk on a kitchen floor
in a house next to a football field
looking not for my brain, or heart now
but my dignity
07/30/2011 Posted on 07/30/2011 Copyright © 2024 Ryan Narce
Member Comments on this Poem |
Posted by Anita Mac on 07/31/11 at 02:11 AM This feels heartbreakingly real. That roller-coaster of emotions; the various stages of rationalization and realization and then that sinking feeling... Oh dear G_d, I hate that sinking feeling! Your rhythm and phrasing is spot on for each phase; it's amazing. |
Posted by Joan Serratelli on 07/31/11 at 03:33 PM I ABSOLUTELY agree with Anita- a winning write. Honest , open and real. |
Posted by Frankie Sanchez on 08/01/11 at 06:57 PM This is a brilliantly executed piece. This captured that feeling mercilessly. This is by far one of the best poems I have read on this site in quite some time. Well done. |
Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 08/03/11 at 03:19 PM Really a fine piece - the theme is not new - the execution is unique and evokes great emotion. Thank you. |
Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 08/06/11 at 01:34 PM The '&' definitely sets the tone and pace here, and I like that. Thought provoking imaagery throughout. |
Posted by Pall Kvaran on 01/18/12 at 08:45 AM Excellent |
Posted by Angie Jenkins on 08/08/12 at 05:42 AM Incredible poem; it really rings completely true for every stage, from infatuation to despair. This is the first poem I've seen in a while that depicts the reality of human emotions and relationships. Well done! Really great write. |
Posted by Elizabeth Shaw on 08/08/12 at 02:14 PM this is sooooooo good - best i've read in a long while. |
Posted by Linda Fuller on 08/09/12 at 02:35 AM When this wonderful piece first appeared, I added it to my favorites and gave it highest marks but evidently didn't comment - however, better articulators than I have pretty much covered it, I think. I don't know what it is about "the initial waves of real affection" that so gets to me - teary-eyed and throat aching. Probably something to do with lost, misspent youth. Thank you for this, Ryan. |
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